Nowadays it is possible to move creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated to amusement parks for the purpose of peoples’ recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In today’s world aquatic animals draw human attention and people are using them for various purposes. While moving under water animals to recreational centers offers some benefits, there are a few drawbacks worth considering.
There are three main reasons why transferring ocean creatures to the amusement parks seems logical and useful. Firstly, it provides individuals with the chance of getting familiar with a wide range of these kinds of animals because the majority of people are not able to see ocean creatures in the original places. Secondly, a plenty of citizens consider watching these creatures closely as a hobby. Because of this, a number of careers are created and it would be a source of income. Finally, it plays a significant role in science developments as scientists will be able to monitor and search about ocean creatures. As a result, scientists will possibly find new things that contribute to protecting those animals that are in danger of extinction.
On the other hand, some downsides could be noted. Initially, the ecosystem of the ocean is probably faced with a number of problems when moving a great deal of ocean creatures to other places. Because those in danger of extinction will be killed by human. In addition, it is not moral to use animals for the purpose of recreational sources for people. Finally, these kinds of creatures should not be used for experiment. Mainly because they will be annoyed by moving or touching by human.
In conclusion, it is necessary to weigh the benefits against the drawbacks before coming to a decision as to whether ocean animals should be replaced in recreational centers or not. In my opinion, we have to let them live in their natural habitats no matter what. (290 words).
- Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small number of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.Discuss and giv 67
- Some people think that the modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. 11
Nowadays it is possible to
Nowadays it is possible to move creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated to amusement parks for the purpose of peoples’ recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In today’s world aquatic animals draw human attention and people are using them for various purposes. While moving underwater animals to recreational centers offers some benefits, there are a few drawbacks worth considering.
There are three main reasons why transferring ocean creatures to amusement parks seems logical and useful. Firstly, it provides individuals with the chance of getting familiar with a wide range of these kinds of animals because the majority of people are not able to see ocean creatures in the original places. Secondly, plenty of citizens consider watching these creatures closely as a hobby. Because of this, a number of careers are created and it would be a source of income. Finally, it plays a significant role in science developments as scientists will be able to monitor and search about ocean creatures. As a result, scientists will possibly find new things that contribute to protecting those animals that are in danger of extinction.
On the other hand, some downsides could be noted. Initially, the ecosystem of the ocean is probably faced with a number of problems when moving a great deal of ocean creatures to other places. Because those in danger of extinction will be killed by a human. In addition, it is not moral to use animals for the purpose of recreational sources for people. Finally, these kinds of creatures should not be used for an experiment. Mainly because they will be annoyed by moving or touching by a human.
In conclusion, it is necessary to weigh the benefits against the drawbacks before coming to a decision as to whether ocean animals should be replaced in recreational centers or not. In my opinion, we have to let them live in their natural habitats no matter what. (290 words).
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eal of ocean creatures to other places. Because those in danger of extinction will be k...
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Line 6, column 104, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...e drawbacks before coming to a decision as to whether ocean animals should be replaced in rec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08841463415 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83495112362 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548780487805 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5124413702 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7222222222 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0796021735243 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0242714116491 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308742047584 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0542680004576 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336570033156 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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