Nowadays, countries are measured by so many indicators: some are praised because of their high GDP growth rate, while others are proud of the Nobel Prizes they have won; some label themselves to have the most appropriate medical and education system, while other governments utilize their authority and centralization to boost the economy. Questions like what makes a country great are always asked, and as is often the case, opinions tend to differ. As far as I am concerned, however, I consider the general welfare of a nation’s people a better indicator.
To begin with, I believe that the ultimate goal for a country to exist is to maximize the utility of its citizens, rather than to make only a small number of its citizens effulgent. More specifically, a country should consider more about the general welfare, making its people’s life more qualified and more valuable. Imagine a country which has nurtured a large number of Nobel Prize winners, collected novel paintings from all over the world, and developed the most sophisticated legal systems to ensure the stabilization of the society, but at the same time, the majority of its citizens are pecunious and in severe poverty. Can this country be called great? No. This indicates extreme inequality of inside the country, and such a system cannot be stable and is unlikely to foster future growth.
Secondly, I think abstract concepts, fantastic paintings and national machines are only valuable when they have applications. It’s true that we need scientists to explore the unknown world and develop series of theories for us to understand the physical world, but theories can only create values when they have applications: we benefit from the infrastructures instead of the concepts in engineering books, and we take advantage of economic growth rather than abstract models in macroeconomic books. As a result, we do need those metaphysical achievements to be applied, which results in the improvement of the general welfare.
I do admit that the achievements of rulers, artists and scientists are unignorable and is the foundation to ensure the stability, educated level and future development of a country, but a country can never have only leader and no followers. The disabled, the poor and the pedestrian majority are all followers which make up the majority part of our society, the part that shouldn’t be represented only by those who have power, who are well-educated, and who have innovative ideas. They are also the part that should be paid attention to. That’s why I think the country is successful if they have good leaders, but is great when it takes care of all its general public.
From the ultimate goal that a country should maintain, I think the general welfare is helpful in forming a stable society with most people’s utility being maximized. Also, in a world emphasizing efficiency and value-added, the conceptual achievements are more valuable when they have applications and improve the life of the public. In these two senses, a country can be called great if it devoted to the betterment of general welfare instead of the achievement of its ‘leaders’.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... its citizens, rather than to make only a small number of its citizens effulgent. More specifical...
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Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...e. Imagine a country which has nurtured a large number of Nobel Prize winners, collected novel pa...
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Line 7, column 664, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... is great when it takes care of all its general public. From the ultimate goal that a count...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, i think, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2678.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 517.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17988394584 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03069163592 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500967117988 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 862.2 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.5999379991 60.3974514979 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.777777778 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7222222222 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201821125429 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072023557956 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703498764193 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119463498613 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399173044866 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.