The chart is showing the following data of Unemployed, employed & further education of Australian students after leaving secondary school over the past three decades. And it's a great achievement that the percentage of unemployed sector has been decreased with 2% from 1980 to 2000 which is still good in terms of unemployment.
As we all know employment is a major demand for living and people are more focusing on employment: in 1980 it was 40% and after two decades it become 55% which is quite good but on a major scale the percentage of further education has been decreasing tremendously which will directly affect the development and economic growth of a Country. People in past years used to pay much attention on their educations for example: in 1980 it was 58% but over the upcoming decades it rapidly fallout and in 2000 it remains only up to 37%.
Overall progress on an individual scale can be seen on employed and unemployed sector which is remarkably appreciating
but we all know education is the main and prominent step for our future growth and without being educated we even will not be able to get employment and it will directly effect our lifestyle.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...school over the past three decades. And its a great achievement that the percentage...
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Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...980 it was 40% and after two decades it become 55% which is quite good but on a major ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...00 it remains only up to 37%. Overall progress on an individual scale can be s...
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Line 6, column 171, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... to get employment and it will directly effect our lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, still, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 977.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86069651741 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7637820689 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592039800995 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 22.4926829268 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.163203666 43.030603864 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.4 112.824112599 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.2 22.9334400587 175% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0611545312964 0.215688989381 28% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452014588816 0.103423049105 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778458936026 0.0843802449381 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0402613429242 0.15604864568 26% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055605709983 0.0819641961636 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 13.2329268293 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.34 61.2550243902 64% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.3012195122 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.9970731707 164% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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