In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States—birds in particular. Unfortunately for birds, these trends are likely to continue, with the result that the number of birds in the United States will necessarily decline.
First, as human populations and settlements continue to expand, birds’ natural habitats will continue to disappear. Forests, wetlands, and grasslands will give way to ever more homes, malls, and offices. As the traditional areas suitable for birds keep decreasing, so will the size of the bird populations that depend on those vanishing habitats.
Second, agricultural activities must increase to keep pace with the growing human population. The growth of agriculture will also result in the further destruction of bird habitats as more and more wilderness areas are converted to agricultural use. As a result, bird populations in rural areas will continue to decline.
Third, as human settlements expand and agriculture increases, the use of chemical pesticides will also increase. Pesticides are poisons designed to kill agricultural and home garden pests, such as insects, but inevitably, pesticides get into the water and into the food chain for birds where they can harm birds. Birds that eat the poisoned insects or drink contaminated water can die as a result, and even if pesticides do not kill birds outright, they can prevent them from reproducing successfully. So pesticides have significantly contributed to declines in bird population, and because there will continue to be a need to control agricultural pests in the future, this decline will continue.
by growing of the human population and increase in urban life and urban area, there is not appropriate space for some animals and specially birds so birds can not live in that place and they will disappear from urban area and environment for the consequence. although some animals can continue to live in urban area. about second point, agriculture will not keep to increase because in some case area for agriculture become less and less as the result of increasing and growth of the human population. also we use less pesticide for crops and garden. as second solution for using chemical pestisides, humans use unpoisons pesticides so this pesticides will not enter in the water and the food chain so those are not harm for bird and will not cause decline in bird population. so today pesticides have not significantly contributed to declines in bird population therefore the birds can continue to live.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
by growing of the human population and inc...
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Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
...ea and environment for the consequence. although some animals can continue to live in ur...
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Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ea and environment for the consequence. although some animals can continue to live in ur...
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Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: About
...als can continue to live in urban area. about second point, agriculture will not keep...
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Line 1, column 439, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ea for agriculture become less and less as the result of increasing and growth of ...
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Line 1, column 503, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ing and growth of the human population. also we use less pesticide for crops and gar...
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Line 1, column 503, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...ing and growth of the human population. also we use less pesticide for crops and gar...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...se less pesticide for crops and garden. as second solution for using chemical pest...
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Line 1, column 637, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...des, humans use unpoisons pesticides so this pesticides will not enter in the water ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...l not cause decline in bird population. so today pesticides have not significantly...
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Line 1, column 906, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erefore the birds can continue to live.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 10.4613686534 19% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 12.0772626932 8% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 22.412803532 22% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 755.0 1373.03311258 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 153.0 270.72406181 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93464052288 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 4.04702891845 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69579123049 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 145.348785872 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542483660131 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 419.366225166 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.6103357332 49.2860985944 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.833333333 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250647274321 0.272083759551 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126280713862 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064138955991 0.0662205650399 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250647274321 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 63.6247240618 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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