Integrated Writing TPO 20
The article states that "let it burn" policy has caused a lot of damages and "let it bum" policy should be replace it. The reading provides three reasons of support for this opinion but the professor explain that fire is part of nature and it shouldn't be hindered and she refutes each of author's reasons.
First the reading claims that Yellowstone fire caused huge damages to the park's vegetations. The professor refutes this point by saying that fire actually helped some other vegetations form to thrive in the region. She explained that new species of plants that needed vast places had the opportunity to grow in emptied places. Thus this new colonization helped the vegetations.
Second, the article posits that this fire was affected wild life as well. However, the professor said that this new plants that has been thrived in the emptied region helped small animals like rabbit and hare to have the opportunity to live in this region and use these new grown plants as their food. Also their colonization helped animals who haunt these animals to migrate to this region and overall wildlife of regions expanded because of that fire.
Third, the reading says that the fire comprised the value of the park as a tourist attraction, which has unwanted negative consequences for the economical status of local people. The professor opposes this point by arguing that there is a fallacy in this argument because big fires like the fire of 1988 doesn't happen every year and we haven't see such a fire since then because that year's summer was very hot and there was low rain fall.
In conclusion, suppressing natural forest fires is not necessary and it doesn't have catastrophic consequences in wildlife plants and animals, and tourism industry.
Comments
I got 20 because of 4
I got 20 because of 4 grammatical errors and I got extra time and I wrote a conclusion?!
Not exactly, but you lost
Not exactly, but you lost credit greatly if a sentence is developed like '...policy should be replace it.'.
So better to put time to double check grammar issues after essay writing.
The essay may get 22-23 without grammar issues.
and "let it bum" policy should be replace it.
and the policy should be replaced.
but the professor explain that
but the professor explains that
the article posits that this fire was affected wild life as well.
the article posits that this fire affected wild life as well.
the article posits that this fire was affected by wild life as well.
the professor said that this new plants
the professor said that this new plant
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need a conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 298 250
No. of Characters: 1426 1200
No. of Different Words: 157 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.155 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.785 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.418 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.789 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.649 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4