The author of the passage argues that the basket with distinctive pattern previously only found in close proximity to ancient village of Palea may not be unique to Palean people after all. The author claims that the basket was also found in Lithos an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The argument also mentions that its not possible for Palean people to cross the Brim River without boat and no boats have been found. However, the argument is flawed and fails to provide substantial evidence to warrant the claims.
First of all, the author falsely assumes the geographical setup of ancient and modern times as one and the same. It might be possible that Brim River that existed between Palea and Lithos was non existent or perhaps was very shallow. The climate conditions following the ancient world change the topography of the area which resulted in the formation of the river. The argument fails to provide any logical evidence regarding the existence of the water body. Hence, if this is the case then author has wrongly concluded about the unique basket of the Palean people.
Furthermore, it might also happen that there exists a different path other than Brim River between Palea and Lithos making it easier for both the civilizations to trade goods easily. This path may be longer but it does not necessarily mean that the two civilizations didn’t have any trade. For example, if one country has put restriction on any trade routes through their land then we can’t just assume that two different countries who have shortest trade route through that country don’t trade. Therefore, taking this point into account the argument seems to be very faulty.
Moreover, the author assumes that both Palea and Lithos directly traded goods with each other but that might not necessarily be the case. The Palea may have traded with some other civilization with which the Lithos also traded which allowed the people in Lithos to buy Palean goods. Like is the case of modern world China manufactures iPhones but the Americans sell them.
In conclusion, the argument is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide scientific and logical evidence to the above-mentioned points then it might help make the argument stronger.
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- Until now, the distinctive patterned baskets were thought to exist only in Palea. Recently, archaeologists found a Palean basket in the city of Lithos. Now, there exists Brim river between these two cities. No evidence of boats till now and the river bein 63
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1884 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.423 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.974 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...nctive pattern previously only found in close proximity to ancient village of Palea may not be ...
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Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...llage across the Brim River from Palea. The argument also mentions that its not pos...
^^^
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: ONE_AND_THE_SAME[1]
Message: Use simply 'the same'.
Suggestion: the same
...al setup of ancient and modern times as one and the same. It might be possible that Brim River t...
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Line 5, column 447, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the shortest'.
Suggestion: have the shortest
...assume that two different countries who have shortest trade route through that country don&ap...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, after all, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0625 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50203367804 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4921875 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5340212566 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186131265449 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616425656947 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638158539476 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10417887655 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872604637422 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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