The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000

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The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

The given chart illustrates how many people were smoking per 1000 people in a specific nation over a 40 year period from 1960 to 2000.

overall, it can be seen that the percentage of women who smoked increased while the number of men smoker plummet dramatically over the period shown. Also, in the end of the period the rate of both women and men smokers were the same.

looking at the data in more detail, it is clear that the percentage of men who smoked were 600 per 1000 people, which was the highest percentage. whereas the women smokers were 100 smokers per 1000 people in 1960. They then increased dramatically until reached 300 smokers per 1000 people in 1975, while there was a moderate plunge in men smokers.

Turning to the remaining data , it is evident that the number of women and men smokers levelled off in the next 15 years respectively. This was followed by the former decreased sharply and the latter fell slightly. Finally, both men and women reached a low of approximately 200 smokers per 1000 people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Overall
... 40 year period from 1960 to 2000. overall, it can be seen that the percentage of ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Looking
...men and men smokers were the same. looking at the data in more detail, it is clear...
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Line 9, column 147, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whereas
...ople, which was the highest percentage. whereas the women smokers were 100 smokers per ...
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Line 9, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ople, which was the highest percentage. whereas the women smokers were 100 smokers per ...
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Line 13, column 30, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...kers. Turning to the remaining data , it is evident that the number of women...
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Line 13, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Turning to the remaining data , it is evident that the number of women and men...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, look, so, then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72928176796 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43995640782 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546961325967 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4780836052 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1111111111 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230702667609 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10450389021 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101591173805 0.0843802449381 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161231104398 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119886119751 0.0819641961636 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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