Nowadays, it takes much more time for an enormous number of people to commute to working place or school. Some opinions are given that it is beneficial while others definitely believes in it’s detriment. I personally opine that this increment apparently generates both advantageous and disadvantageous influences on society and individuals as well.
On the one hand, long distance travel could be economical for on-tight budget residences who cannot afford the urban accommodation. Therefore, they populate in suburbs or areas surrounding the big cities with the purpose of cutting down their living cost and except to travel daily by reasonable-priced public transport namely trains or buses. Besides, unlike the quick life pace in the noisy and crowed cities, some people choose to live in small villages or rural regions where they can breathe freshly and live their healthy life in peaceful atmosphere, which the urban areas cannot bring about.
On the other hand, there are several disadvantages. First, talking a distant itinerary normally consume the vast energy, apparently it could lead to exhausted status at work or at class. Therefore, their performances easily get the low results. Additionally, spending more time on travelling means less amount of time left for performing other staffs. Thus, they need to exploit the time effectively and time management could be much more challenging and hassle for them to get sufficient time tackling all other daily work. Regarding the environment issue, the more demand on travelling will lead to the bigger consumption of fuel emitting the carbon dioxin which consequently is delivered to the air and cause the environment degradation.
In conclusion, despite the practical advantages to the travelers, long commuting journeys that employees or students takes daily are really detrimental to the environment and people’ productivity.
Hi Trang, I don't deem your…
Hi Trang,
I don't deem your points in the first body paragraph convincing. I noticed, from your writing, that moving longer hours as if a REASON that makes people opt for living in suburbs, and then provides them with several benefits (cutting down living costs, reasonable price of public transport, fresh at, etc).
However, I think that relationship was considered reversely: moving longer hours is a CONSEQUENCE of living in outer areas (this consequence also results from the low quality of infrastructure, unreliable public transport systems ...).The fact is that unaffordable living costs in urban areas/city centres coerce people to move to suburbs/peripheral towns. Consequently, they ought to commute longer distances, lengthening the commuting time.
In another word, I think you didn't mention the benefits of spending more and more time travelling.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, consequently, first, if, really, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52054794521 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01422784893 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643835616438 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0446579368 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251889871174 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808081096326 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071086572681 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139909047071 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.097720587323 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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