Some people believe that the range of technology available to individuals is increasing the gap between the rich people and the poor people. Others think this has an opposite effect. Discuss both view and give your own opinion
In recent years, technology has been considered as one of the most successful inventions worldwide by human beings. It is believed that technological advancements play an essential role in narrowing the gap between the wealthy people and the impoverished ones while others disagree with this idea. Personally, I’m opposed to the opinion that gap between social classes is attributed to technology advance
There are several reasons why wealth inequality is the result of technology innovations. Firstly, in terms of the healthcare industry, certain advancements in technology are actually unaffordable to underprivileged people as modern medicines and curing processes are becoming more and more expensive. For instance, if a rich person is diagnosed with cancer, he would only spare a little part of his income portion for costly treatment such as radiation therapy or specific cancer pills in order to improve his health condition. On the other hand, It would cost a fortune for the poor people to have their conventional treatments without the guarantee that their health will get better.
There are, however, other people who believe that technology advance will lessen the social gap between people of the upper and lower class. First of all, technological products, which were formerly exclusive for people with high social status, are now available to all people from different types of income. Thus, poor people can get access to modern items such as smartphones, which was considered expensive many decades ago but now it is much cheaper and widely used due to the technological development. Moreover, the internet has diminished the gap between different social classes as it gives connection to every individual and therefore, changing people's mindset by enhancing the lower class’ self-esteem and mitigate the rich’s disrespect to the poor.
In conclusion, while certain advancements in technology cause negative effects to the wealth inequality between the rich and the poor, certain developments actually bring more people together. I hope that in the future the world will become become as one, regardless of economic status.
- In recent years the family structure has changed as well as family roles What are the changes occurring Do you think these changes are positive or negative 77
- In recent years the family structure has changed as well as family roles What are the changes occurring Do you think these changes are positive or negative 89
- Some people believe that the range of technology available to individuals is increasing the gap between the rich people and the poor people Others think this has an opposite effect Discuss both view and give your own opinion 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 235, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: become
... hope that in the future the world will become become as one, regardless of economic status. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47447447447 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91108886885 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588588588589 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.3573713027 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.916666667 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5833333333 7.06120827912 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340239242464 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126067776254 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867687274456 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198177293018 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785430884021 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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