Tpo 10. Do you agree with statement that playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Games are part of our entertainment, but sometimes could be part of learning. It is thought by some people that children waste a lot of time by playing vidio games. They believe that parents should controll them and limit their play time. However, I believe that playing vidio games is very helpful for children. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, contrary to the belief that children should not be allowed to play video games because they would wast a lot of time, evidence shows that young adults who played computer games did not wasted their time but they used the free time effectively. For instance, statistics have shown that 78 percent of children who used their free time playing computer games, they have improved their motor movement skills, compare that to the counterparts who did not play computer games. According to this, it is clear that children who play use their time wisely by improving their health overall.
On top of that, with the development of new technology, new generations have too many opportunities to develop new skills in an entertainment form. They could learn how to become vigilant and increase their abilities to solve difficult problems, so that they could win the game and enjoy their thrill of the victory. My own experience is a compelling example of this. About ten years ago, my brother bought a computer where he could play his favorite games. That device was a new thing for us all in the family. After my brother started to play with that we all became curious about the game and started to look at how he was playing, what he had to do to become a winner. I saw that it was not easy at all because in order to win you have to had special skills such as, good reflection and intuition. Those games sparked an interest in me, I wanted to learn those skills. After I tried for a couple of weeks, I was able to win and that made me happy. Consequently, I was able to develop skills that I did not possess it before. I was able to make quick decisions in order to solve the problems, so I could win. Overall, computer games would help children to critically think to solve a variety of issues. Therefore, it is better to play computer games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f learning. It is thought by some people that children waste a lot of time by pla...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'waste'
Suggestion: waste
...dults who played computer games did not wasted their time but they used the free time ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, such as, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58168316832 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48632545796 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502475247525 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1366062745 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1428571429 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335220230031 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095181340234 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101605222926 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246646848384 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837428133697 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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