Cambridge IELTS 6General Training (A)You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You arenot satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture

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Cambridge IELTS 6
General Training (A)
You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are
not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture

Dear Mr.Silva,

This is a kind request for you to consider on bad condition of furniture.As you know about me very well,I came from Sri Lanka and now it's almost two weeks for rentout your house.I would really like the open area garden and the area which house is situated.The house is really beatufull but my only concern is the dinning table leg is broken.

I have shown this to a person who promissed me to fix the dinning table leg for $40.This dinning table is very much important to us and its very Old therefore need to fix this earlier before it totaly gets broken.

I would kindly requesting for you to take an action on this issue and if your okay for me to fix this table,please let me know within this week.In prior to start the work and please be kind enough to reduce the first two months rent fee for $40.

Hope you will reply me as soon as possible.

you're sincerely,
John

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Sentence: This is a kind request for you to consider on bad condition of furniture.As you know about me very well,I came from Sri Lanka and now it's almost two weeks for rentout your house.
Description: The token for is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to for and rentout

but my only concern is the dinning table leg is broken.
but my only concern is the dinning table leg which is broken.

This dinning table is very much important to us
This dinning table is very important to us

and its very Old
and it is very Old

Sentence: This is a kind request for you to consider on bad condition of furniture.As you know about me very well,I came from Sri Lanka and now it's almost two weeks for rentout your house.I would really like the open area garden and the area which house is situated.The house is really beatufull but my only concern is the dinning table leg is broken.
Error: rentout Suggestion: rent out
Error: beatufull Suggestion: beautiful

Sentence: I have shown this to a person who promissed me to fix the dinning table leg for 40.This dinning table is very much important to us and its very Old therefore need to fix this earlier before it totaly gets broken.
Error: totaly Suggestion: total
Error: promissed Suggestion: promised

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2

Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-rater is sensitive.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 176 200
No. of Characters: 702 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.642 4.0
Average Word Length: 3.989 4.6
Word Length SD: 1.919 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 35 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 18 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 11 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.436 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 1 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.204 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4