Sport is becoming a business More and more companies are getting involved in sporting events Do you think that it is a positive or negative development

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Sport is becoming a business. More and more companies are getting involved in sporting events. Do you think that it is a positive or negative development ?

It is true that corporates have the tendency to play a role in different aspects of competitive sports nowadays. While I understand that this bilateral relation may cause some negative impacts, I would argue that it is a step long sought by sports advocates to help sporting events take off .
The unfavorable side of this movement can be attributed to two main factors, match-fixing and the use of illegal substance. Many companies which are funding sporting events, are simultaneously sponsoring one or mutliple teams of their own. Hence, many people are apprehensive about the idea that the result of a tournament could be predetermined by how much money big companies are pouring in to buy their teams’ victories. Furthermore, substantial monetary benefits may entice athletes into using performance-enhancing drugs in sports tournaments. This can have detrimental effects on sporting events, as it jeopardizes the health of its users, while ruining sportsmanship and the outputs of all the matches that it is involved in.
On the flip side, funding from corporates can facilitate sports development in many ways. Firstly, it helps sporting organizations have the money needed to organize holistically better events. This money can be used for many activities, namely the production and marketing of the campaign, to serve the purpose of meeting the public’s expectations by bringing out a fully operational and aesthetically pleasing tournament. Secondly, sportsmen, atleast those who play popular ones, are able to secure themselves a stable or even lucrative income. As a result, devoted athletes can rid themselves of financial worries and be extra focused on their games to give more eye-pleasing performances for the followers of the sport.
In conclusion, while the connection between sporting events and commercial companies can have several bad effects, I am convinced that the benefits far outweigh the drawbacks.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 267, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to sport' or 'sport'.
Suggestion: to sport; sport
...long sought by sports advocates to help sporting events take off . The unfavorable side...
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Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...vocates to help sporting events take off . The unfavorable side of this movement ...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to sport' or 'sport'.
Suggestion: to sport; sport
...lopment in many ways. Firstly, it helps sporting organizations have the money needed to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45333333333 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22095379156 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623333333333 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.960653656 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.846153846 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206511963409 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712771494292 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499303135642 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127602036295 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242456430956 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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