Some people think that the best way to ensure road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there is an increased concern toward traffic safety especially which age is the most suitable age for people to have driver licenses. While I agree that higher threshold of age should be set for people who want to drive cars or ride motorbikes, I would argue that there are other aspects to consider to enhance road safety.
To begin with, it is understandable why many people support the policy to increase the minimum legal age for controlling vehicles for some reasons. Firstly, since the more people become mature the more they develop both physically and mentally, they are more likely to understand traffic laws and responsible for others’ safety when driving. As a result, the number of traffic accidents can be greatly minimized. Secondly, as controlling motorbikes or cars requires controllers to have enough strength which is less likely to enough in the youngster. Therefore, a higher age should be set to make sure that individuals are mature physically enough to drive. For example, it is expectable for high school students to ride scooters however if they want to ride motorbikes which are much heavier they have to wait until 20 years old.
However, I would argue that other aspects also play an important role in protecting people when driving. Initially, because controlling vehicles requires fast reflex when an incidence happens, the ability to process and distance vision is also crucial. In addition, height, weight, and etc. need to be met, psychological assessment must be done before drive test. If a person is consider to be old enough to drive but his or her mental illness could not be recorded, this poses some threats for other people on the road. Secondly, educating citizens to obey traffic laws by popularizing them though social media, news and school curriculums is an economical and effective way. Finally, the government can invest more money on upgrading and maintenance of transportation infrastructure.
In conclusion, while I accept that the higher minimum legal age to drive can ensure the road safety to some extent, I believe that this is not the most important factor to help riders and drivers more safer.
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It is believed that raising…
It is believed that raising the minimum driving age is the most effective method to improve road safety. While I accept that this approach has some effects in the short term, I believe that a longer-term and better solution is to impose stricter punishments for driving offences.
I think that increasing the minimum legal driving age can help reduce traffic accidents, thus improving the safety of roads. This is because a large number of traffic incidents are caused by young people’s careless driving. Many of them are not mature enough to fully understand the serious consequences of their actions or to be responsible for what they caused. Raising the driving age, therefore, can make sure that the youngest drivers are mature enough to take driving seriously and to protect their own lives and other people’s lives when driving.
In my opinion, however, this approach is only effective to a limited extent, due to the fact that nowadays many youngsters still drive without a driving licence. So, a more effective way to ensure road traffic safety is to impose more severe punishments on those who commit driving offences. For example, a longer prison sentence could be given for very serious offences and a heavier fine could be imposed for running a red light or driving without a helmet. These punishments could help deter potential offenders and prevent people from re-offending.
In conclusion, I believe that introducing stricter regulations for driving offences is a much better measure to increase road safety in comparison with increasing the minimum driving age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09243697479 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74577251189 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543417366947 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4898762501 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.625 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29210167842 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837227716162 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833265266385 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196294047996 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689517526953 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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