The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 word

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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 word.

The provided line graph gives information about free time activities of the elderly in the United State in the period of 20 years from 1980 to 2010.
In general, reading, hiking , watching TV and surfing the internet experienced an upward trend while the theater shows a downward trend.
As the given chart, there was a dramatic rise with no fluctuation in hiking from 20% in 1980s to over 80% in 2010s. Both watching TV and surfing the internet increased gradually between 1980s and 2000s, however, surfing the internet started to increase sharply from 15% in 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with the fall of watching TV in this period.
From 1980 to 1990, in comparison with going to the theater, which underwent a significant decrease by 20%, the percentage of reading rose gradually. In 1990s, going to the theater increased back again peaking at over 45% in 2010s while reading suddenly fell to 20% in 2000s before reaching 60% in 2010s.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...80 to 2010. In general, reading, hiking , watching TV and surfing the internet ex...
^^
Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
... with no fluctuation in hiking from 20% in 1980s to over 80% in 2010s. Both watching TV ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...in hiking from 20% in 1980s to over 80% in 2010s. Both watching TV and surfing the inter...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2000s'.
Suggestion: in the 2000s
...et started to increase sharply from 15% in 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...e sharply from 15% in 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with the fall of watching ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y from 15% in 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with the fall of watching TV...
^^
Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with the fall of watching TV in this per...
^^
Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'In the 1990s'.
Suggestion: In the 1990s
...e percentage of reading rose gradually. In 1990s, going to the theater increased back ag...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...ncreased back again peaking at over 45% in 2010s while reading suddenly fell to 20% in 2...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2000s'.
Suggestion: in the 2000s
...010s while reading suddenly fell to 20% in 2000s before reaching 60% in 2010s.
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 294, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...ell to 20% in 2000s before reaching 60% in 2010s.
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 790.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84662576687 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51725160078 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601226993865 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.6484552032 43.030603864 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.666666667 112.824112599 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0999801037359 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583104239915 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846260110066 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801817338763 0.15604864568 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956673458135 0.0819641961636 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...80 to 2010. In general, reading, hiking , watching TV and surfing the internet ex...
^^
Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
... with no fluctuation in hiking from 20% in 1980s to over 80% in 2010s. Both watching TV ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...in hiking from 20% in 1980s to over 80% in 2010s. Both watching TV and surfing the inter...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2000s'.
Suggestion: in the 2000s
...et started to increase sharply from 15% in 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...e sharply from 15% in 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with the fall of watching ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y from 15% in 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with the fall of watching TV...
^^
Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n 2000s to over 50% in 2010s contrasted with the fall of watching TV in this per...
^^
Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'In the 1990s'.
Suggestion: In the 1990s
...e percentage of reading rose gradually. In 1990s, going to the theater increased back ag...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...ncreased back again peaking at over 45% in 2010s while reading suddenly fell to 20% in 2...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2000s'.
Suggestion: in the 2000s
...010s while reading suddenly fell to 20% in 2000s before reaching 60% in 2010s.
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 294, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 2010s'.
Suggestion: in the 2010s
...ell to 20% in 2000s before reaching 60% in 2010s.
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 790.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84662576687 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51725160078 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601226993865 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.6484552032 43.030603864 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.666666667 112.824112599 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0999801037359 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583104239915 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846260110066 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801817338763 0.15604864568 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956673458135 0.0819641961636 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.