The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 19040 and 2040 in three different countries

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 19040 and 2040 in three different countries

The line graph illustrates the number of people living in three different countries (USA, Sweden and Japan) aged 65 and more than over 100 years from 1940 to 2040. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall, the percentage of the population aged 65 and over increase over the period given. At the start of the period, American accounted for the highest proportion among three countries, while Japan is predicted that it will replace the United States in 2040.
Between 1940 and 2020, USA and Sweden experienced an oscillation in the percentage of people aged 65 and over. In 1940, around 10% of people in America aged 65 and over compared to about 8% in Sweden. While as, the number of Japanese people living considerably more than 65 just over 5% and this number is the lowest among three countries during this period.
In the next 20 years, the percentage of three countries are predicted that will almost increase. There was an dramatically growth in Japan in the 1930s with the highest percentage will be at 25%. In 2040, it is thought that nearly 28% Japanese will be 65 and more, while the figure for Sweden and the US will be more gradually lower at 25% and approximately 23% respectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 992.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57663603453 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509615384615 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.0 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.14702708 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9 5.23603664747 17% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302892951556 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123527394609 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934142389092 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199600418074 0.15604864568 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786230087537 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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