Many young people face the problems of finding a job after graduation. Which of the following method would you recommend?
1. asking for others’ advice
2. sending emails to the companies
3. searching information online or other publications
There are various ways to solve the problems of finding a job after young people graduate from their school. While some young people gain advice from others, some send emails to the companies where they want to join. Moreover, they achieve information online or other publications. In my view, they should select to ask for others’ advice. It is so beneficial for them to gain some alternative prospects from others, exploit the people who already join a company, and my personalities from their relatives.
To begin with, the problems of young people who find a job after graduation clear by other viewpoints. Each people have several ideas against their problems. If people concern about their anxiety themselves, it is limited for them to consider the solutions for their problems. However, once they ask their families or friends about them, they acquire different standpoints that they cannot find. As a result, they are capable of clearing their concerns about job hunting.
Secondly, young people take advantage of experiences from others to solve their problems with getting a job. Generally speaking, their parents once did job hunting when they suddenly graduated from university. At this time, they also held their head to get their jobs like their children. Therefore, parents can give their experiences to their children who want to obtain a job. Thus, young people are ready to accept their future jobs from the advice of their parents.
Finally, young people who hold the problems of getting their jobs earn their profound personalities by advice from others. Although they have to introduce themselves in front of the executive people from each company, they are not able to say their characters in front of others because it is not enough for them to understand themselves. Hence, it is so significant for them to catch advice from the people who have strong friendships or are family attain their deep personalities. From this movement, they ease their anxieties about their future jobs.
To sum up, young people should inquire about advice from others for their problems with a future job after graduation. They can gain other standpoints that others only see, utilize the experiences from their parents, and achieve deep natures from their friends or families.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...r graduation clear by other viewpoints. Each people have several ideas against their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16935483871 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54267968247 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478494623656 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8702283464 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5714285714 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22455981209 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105843705198 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821286023294 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17120679401 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582844959756 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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