Some people suggest that bringing up children by the whole family including uncles, aunt, and grandparents is better, rather than only by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples.
Can children who are residing in a joint family become a better person by learning from the valuable experience of their elders? As a matter of fact, the question clearly outlines the comparison between joint family and nuclear family, in which the former is clearly better equipped to raise a child than the latter because in joint families the children are under proper supervision and children can easily confide in their grandparents as well as the elders of the family for their problems as they feel safe in that environment. Therefore, I agree with the fact that raising a child in a joint family is better as the parents would not have to hire professionals for taking care of their children which brings economic stability to the family.
Arguably, the trend of joint family is not recurring in the contemporary era for no reason. Since the dawn of human civilization, the upbringing of the children was done in a joint family where they would learn many qualities such as sharing their space with others, which develops the love and affection of the children towards society. For instance, no sooner did a survey by the Harvard University on the children who were residing with their extended families was performed, than it was revealed that those children showed 58% less delinquent behavior rather than those who were brought up in a nuclear family.
Notwithstanding the brighter side, another school of thought opines that, more often than not myriad of teenagers feel trapped in a joint family as they don’t get privacy. While residing in a joint family the decision of the whole family is given importance. Hence, youngsters feel that their individuality is thrown out of consideration. For example, research conducted by the Indian Child Welfare department it was revealed that, 8 out of 10 children who are residing in the joint family never become self-dependent and will remain in their safe zone, owing to the constant need for getting approval from their elders.
To conclude, but for any doubts, mental and psychological support given by the elders in a joint family cannot be replaced by parents alone for the overall development of the children. Therefore, if a balance between the individuality of a person along with the invaluable guidance of the elders is made, it will eventually lead to a socially stable and morally prosperous society; lest good outcomes should be far out of reach.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 546, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
... safe in that environment. Therefore, I agree with the fact that raising a child in a joint family is be...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...joint family as they don’t get privacy. While residing in a joint family the decision...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74932596386 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502475247525 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.60024598 49.4020404114 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.333333333 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 20.7667163134 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165135368079 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699951747693 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045464151199 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104463662507 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437203271167 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.0946893788 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 546, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
... safe in that environment. Therefore, I agree with the fact that raising a child in a joint family is be...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...joint family as they don’t get privacy. While residing in a joint family the decision...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74932596386 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502475247525 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.60024598 49.4020404114 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.333333333 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 20.7667163134 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165135368079 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699951747693 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045464151199 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104463662507 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437203271167 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.0946893788 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.