TPO31
In today’s growing world, people are facing new brand issues entirely disparate from each other. The matters are varied in the range from parental theme to financial, etc. This causes each individual to feel that today’s new leading world is less happy than then, although many others might not think so. Reasonably speaking, I believe in people’s less being satisfied with their lives in this quickly changing world, and I’m going through this subject by comprehensibly discussing my notions with reasons and examples hereunder.
As the first claim, I’d rather point out the importance of new needs advent in a modern greatening world, the necessity of having electronic devices such as Computers, Cell phones, etc. While we are confronting a world based on digital communications, we are losing so many physical connections and situations that can cause depression for anyone. Simply speaking, imagine a little boy in ’80s as an example whom could play football with his friends in the street in a hot summer evening, and then compare it with a late decade boy instead of physically playing football is playing it as a computer game in PS or a PC, as a fact that outside seem hazardous in parents’ minds. One of the main obstacles, passive being can cause is lessening the level of some important hormones such as Dopamine, which affects directly on people’s happiness, and makes them feel less satisfied with their lives.
For the second sake, I am going to speak about how growing cities, as a result of the world growing, can make families getting away from each other. While capital cities are where the main facilities are concentrated there, youth have to migrate from their smaller cities to a bigger one, to make a better life and future for themselves. Sometimes even their migration is not only limited to a bigger city or state but also a bigger developed country that might be continents far from their hometown. As a specific example, I want to mention my friends and myself who already immigrated or near to migration. Immigration is starting an entirely new life with new people who might be with a different race to yours. The difficulties in facing a new language completely diverse with your mother tongue, and the hardness of pursuing new friendships as a result of different race or language, can cause depression.
In conclusion, the world growing not only lessened individuals’ physical movements but also had gotten people away from their hometown and family and faced them with a totally new world which is big and grown but not happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 64, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'needs'' or 'need's'?
Suggestion: needs'; need's
... rather point out the importance of new needs advent in a modern greatening world, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9837962963 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70137103679 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564814814815 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.4866915188 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.533333333 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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