The following appeared in a newsletter distributed at a recent political rally.
"Over the past year, the Consolidated Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over one million square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on this land will inevitably result in pollution and environmental disaster, since West Fredonia is home to several endangered animal species. But such disaster can be prevented if consumers simply refuse to purchase products that are made with CCC's copper until the company abandons its mining plans."
In the given passage, it is claimed that disasters from Crust copper company (ccc) can be prevented if consumers refuse to buy products that are made with ccc’s copper unless the company abandons its mining plan. In the argument, the author not only draws a conclusion based on vague and ambiguous terms but also uses data from a limited sample to sweeping generalization all mining plans. Furthermore, the author makes mistakes of focusing solely on ccc as the only factor of disasters.
To begin, the author needs to provide additional data regarding whether mining copper operations in ccc one and most agents of the contamination and engender to collapse animal species. Perhaps, other factors pollute the air and the water which supply animals need. Such a different plant cause pollution more than ccc’s mining operation. if the contamination result from another plant, the author’s argument would be definitely weakened.
Second of all, the author must demonstrate data regarding pollution history at least throughout twenty years, between twenty years ago and now. it is possible to the area has faced significant pollution during the period. For this reason, the author must enhance his argument.
Finally, if the assumption is true, is it possible to refuse to purchase all products made of ccc’s copper? it is possible to buy electronic devices that are made with copper, and ccc could be the only one copper supplier for this industry. if these scenarios have merits, then the conclusion is drawn in the original argument I significantly weakened.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. if the author is able to address these presumptions and conduct further research, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the argument.
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- The following appeared in a newsletter distributed at a recent political rally Over the past year the Consolidated Copper Company CCC has purchased over one million square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia Mining copper on this land wi 50
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1493 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.061 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.696 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.334 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.707 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ution more than ccc’s mining operation. if the contamination result from another p...
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Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ears, between twenty years ago and now. it is possible to the area has faced signi...
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Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...hase all products made of ccc’s copper? it is possible to buy electronic devices t...
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Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... one copper supplier for this industry. if these scenarios have merits, then the c...
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Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...nce on several unwarranted assumptions. if the author is able to address these pre...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ible to fully evaluate the argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, regarding, second, so, then, at least, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45423728814 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79260319001 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579661016949 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1506920248 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.266666667 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142187005643 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464544047133 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552416769157 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771564195588 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532314271489 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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