You recently read an advertisement about the equipment that you bought a few days ago However the information in the advertisement was wrong Write a letter to the manufacturer and say what was the advertisement What information was wrong What should the m

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You recently read an advertisement about the equipment that you bought a few days ago. However, the information in the advertisement was wrong. Write a letter to the manufacturer and say
- what was the advertisement
- What information was wrong
- What should the manufacturer do about this problem

Dear Mr. Hasani,
I am writing to inform you about a problem I noticed in some of your advertisements on the billboards. I saw three wrong advertisements on Sadr highway. Since I bought the same product last month, I decides to write this letter.

To begin with, the subject of the advertisement is a kitchen oven which I am very satisfied with. The model of this item is DJ07 which is introduced on page 15 of your seasonal catalog.

On the advertisements that I saw, the size and also, the maximum temperature has been mentioned wrong. The actual size of this oven is 50 * 50 Cm2 while on the billboards has been written 50*70 cm2. Another wrong information is the highest temperature that this model is able to reach. According to the catalog the heist temperature is 300 C while on the billboard it has mentioned 200 C.

To rectify this problem, there some steps that can be taken to prevent misunderstanding of customers. The first and foremost thing to do is to collect all the advertisement with this wrong information and replace them with the right ones. Besides, it is very essential to recheck all the provided information on the advertisements.

I hope this information will be some of assistance.

Yours sincerely,
Yalda asgari.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 200, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'decide'
Suggestion: decide
...I bought the same product last month, I decides to write this letter. To begin with...
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Line 6, column 389, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on the billboard it has mentioned 200 C. To rectify this problem, there some step...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...some of assistance. Yours sincerely, Yalda asgari.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, so, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1046.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86511627907 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05454528753 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567441860465 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 314.1 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 6.0 0.824742268041 728% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0337091161 44.8134815571 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.7142857143 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3571428571 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 4.34317383033 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192204198196 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688364167313 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649746269959 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111817545568 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829636012216 0.0580467560999 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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