Small town got extra money. Do you think it is better to spend money to build a park to provide entertainment for everyone in the town, or to build a sports ground for a high school without a sports field?
In today’s modern world, there always has been a controversial topic among people about the notion of which way is best for a government to spend money. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that a budget given to a small city should spend for a high school to build a sport ground. However, I personally subscribe to the view that the money should be spent for all citizens. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elabprated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, the money should invest in builiding a park becaues residents need additional places for the entertainment. In this line of thought, not only do high school students reach the benifits, but also other children find a place for playing. Generally speaking, thanks to over populations, cities are growing rapidly; all families should access to the playground to bringe their childern to these regions, and provide entertainment for them. For example, I remember that when I was a child, my house was far from any parks and playgrounds, and my mother was forced to bringe me there with public transportations. we had to alter three buses to achieve the place. Apart from that, when we always arived there, we should have came back too soon. Had we had a playground near our house, I could have gone there by myselfe, and spent more time on there.
Another reason is that it is not really necessary for each high school to have a sport field. they can utilize other schools’ field. Whit this notion, the governmet can rent a field for the school, and it provides benefits for other high schools too. In fact, there are a variety of tackles, contributing to solving the problem of this school. In contrast, many indiciduals would possess a healthy entertainmente if the government spend the money to build a park. To delve more into it, many young people, nowadays, hang out with their friends in the cafe and restaurants. With a park, they will gain a capability of spend time in recreation grounds, and play sprots such as tenis, golf, and skait, which is healther for their physical and mental states. All in all, the more a city have opportunity to provide healthy enterntainmant for their youth, the more their residents will be healthy and happy.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, I do believe that the city should have parks and entertainmant for all citizens. Not only are most children able to play and have fun, but also it provides a healthy enterntaimant, which is acceesiable for each person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, apart from, as for, for example, in contrast, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78899082569 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68073645674 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529816513761 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8913248346 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4285714286 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2900467846 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883882667851 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775913302911 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180358924469 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651873014721 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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