https www ielts exam net academic writing samples task 1 1063

The table illustrates the attitudes of students towards academic provisions of McGill University in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
Overall, more students gave positive review on different espects of their university in 2015 than that of 2 previous years, except for the cause of the range of modules offered in school.
It's noticeable that students who were satisfied with student services have increased sharply from 54% in 2005 to 95% in 2015. Likewise, the proportion of students got comfortable with library resources was comparatively high, which ranges between 86% and 88%. Similarly, teaching quality rated as being good has slightly fluctuated from 74% to 78%.
In contrast, there was a decrease in student's satisfaction with range of modules offered with the proportion from 39% in 2205 to 25% in 2015.
Another area where students found themselves content with is sports and social facilities with the figure stand steadily at 65% in all there year.

P/s: Please remind me if i have any mistakes, even the small one, any recommendation if possible and give me the band score in my writing. I really appreciate that. Thank you very much.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ill University in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Overall, more students gave positive rev...
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...he range of modules offered in school. Its noticeable that students who were sa...
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...s slightly fluctuated from 74% to 78%. In contrast, there was a decrease in stu...
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...tion from 39% in 2205 to 25% in 2015. Another area where students found themse...
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...dily at 65% in all there year. P/s: Please remind me if i have any mistakes,...
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...mall one, any recommendation if possible and give me the band score in my writing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, likewise, really, similarly, so, except for, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13368983957 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72280224986 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.695187165775 0.547539520022 127% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6818507949 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0103739967526 0.215688989381 5% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00484048185239 0.103423049105 5% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0145214455572 0.0843802449381 17% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00806746975398 0.15604864568 5% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180394107763 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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