Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
The argument though seems cogent at the first instance, if exegesis in detail, may fall apart due to presumptions made. Nature’s way attempt to run a successful business in Plainville may be failed if they don’t analyze the target age group and habits of the people before running a new franchise. Success in other cities may not relate direct connection to natures’ way franchise in Plainville.
Firstly, nature’s way must conduct a demographic and census survey of town as it provides detailed information on the type of age group and community residing in the town and average mortality rate. Comparison between the other town and Plainville might clear the perspective with their health status. As stated if people are more healthy and health-conscious in the town there are chances of other health-related stores that will be detrimental to nature’s way in plains Ville.
Secondly, all-time high sales of running shoes and exercise clothing may be due to cheaper prices in the town. Perhaps, people from other cities might purchase these goods from Plainville which can belie sales of these good alone of Plainville. High sales of running shoes are because of town might be located in a hilly region where running shoes are more comfortable for accessibility. The local health clubs might be offering cheaper rated and combo offers which result in more members of the club and weight training, aerobic classes are maybe the way of living a healthy life which might be preordained of Plainville people.
Moreover, encouraging school students about healthy lifestyles and habits is always beneficial to them but, the health products are for bodybuilders and trainers who are adults which is pernicious to their health. However, children are always advised to play flagging games, carry out yoga, meditation which is more than enough to maintain their health. If nature’s way bases its franchise with the views that the school children will be their potential customers then they may maladjusted to foresee. Thus to bolster the author's argument Plainville must survey with a different hierarchy of questions that will cater to all age groups.
In totality nature’s Ville must conduct an incisive survey with case studies and research along with pieces of evidence and proofs to conclude whether they should set up the franchise in the town or not. It is conjecture to prejudice the author's argument with the paucity of strong and germane proofs.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2018 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.045 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.625 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.338 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 313, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('hilly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('region') instead of another adjective.
...are because of town might be located in a hilly region where running shoes are more comfortabl...
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Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ducts are for bodybuilders and trainers who are adults which is pernicious to their hea...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e than enough to maintain their health. If nature’s way bases its franchise with t...
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Line 5, column 502, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s then they may maladjusted to foresee. Thus to bolster the authors argument Plainvi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...djusted to foresee. Thus to bolster the authors argument Plainville must survey with a ...
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Line 6, column 238, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... not. It is conjecture to prejudice the authors argument with the paucity of strong and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18546365915 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71066506643 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533834586466 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6002795289 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.3125 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9375 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294842852501 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980760097433 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907219322467 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161746869787 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737123768675 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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