The author claims here that as a results of numerous complaints of dizziness and nausea on the part of consumers of Promofoods tuna, the company requested that eight million cans of its tuna be returning for testing. Promofoods concluded that the canned tuna, after all, pose a health risk. This conclusion is based on tests preformed on samples of the recalled cans by the chemists from Promofoods; the chemist found that of the eight food chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, five were not found in any of the tested cans. The chemist did find small amount of other three remaining suspected chemicals but pointed out that these occur naturally in all canned foods.
Stated in this way, the argument distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts and by providing weak evidences.
In support of this conclusion, the author reasons that dizziness and nausea causing chemicals are negligible in the tuna cans. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author's conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, argument readily assumes that their are only eight food chemicals causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea. Also, out of this eight chemicals three are found in the can but author claims that they occur naturally in all canned foods. This is merely an assumption made without much solid ground.
Hence the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly stated that non of the chemicals where present in the tuna cans.The argument readily claims that of all the recalled tuna cans few were tested. This again is a weak and unsupported claim as the chemist have not performed the test on the remaining tuna cans as there might be chances of food chemical detection in other cans. Also, it was not tested for other chemicals which may be the reasons of the dizziness and nausea. If the argument had provided evidence that all the tuna cans which were recalled are tested for the eight food chemicals or any other food chemicals causing health risk then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the chemists who performed the tests were company orientated employees and there was no misleading or false evidence provided to the consumers should be checked at higher level. As many companies provide false or fake data to save the reputation and also, the business of the company from falling down.However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the argument's conclusion in several critical respects, and raises several skeptical questions. For examples, Where all cans were tested? How tested the recalled cans? Was it confidential and were not changed? Without convincing answers to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the claims made by the argument are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the argument must provide clear concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a detailed analysis. Finally, to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about food chemicals causing dizziness and nausea in canned foods.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 544 350
No. of Characters: 2722 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.004 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.56 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 203 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 162 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.529 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.318 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
The author claims here that as a results of numerous complaints of dizziness and...
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Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...mofoods concluded that the canned tuna. after all, pose a health risk. This conclusio...
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Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rovides little credible support for the authors conclusion. Hence the argument can be c...
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Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ble support for the authors conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered incomple...
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Line 4, column 45, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...t of all, argument readily assumes that their are only eight food chemicals causing s...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...mption made without much solid ground. Hence the argument would have been much more ...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...hemicals where present in the tuna cans.The argument readily claims that of all the...
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Line 5, column 678, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...micals causing health risk then it would have been a lot more convincing to the r...
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Line 6, column 311, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...siness of the company from falling down.However, careful scrutiny of the evidence revea...
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Line 6, column 410, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...rovides little credible support for the arguments conclusion in several critical respects...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, after all, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2782.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 542.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13284132841 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6407931542 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426199261993 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.9571725052 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.28 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.68 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310035113281 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102855526433 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146460869196 0.0701772020484 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145294486296 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137224599617 0.0628817314937 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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