It is more important for the government to spend more money on art and music museums than on facilities (like playgrounds, public swimming pool)
every year countries, states, and local governments have a limit budget to invest in different areas such as facilities, museums, and road constraction.most of governments believes that is more important put money through art and music museums. however, I am convinced that the best decision is address the resources to facilities as playgrounds, swimming pools, and public transportation.
No one can deny that art and music are important in communities because it is the way that local artist and musician can show their work to the word. In addition, when they have same aides from governments are better. however, there are others important fields where the money could go. For instance, playgrounds are places where children enjoy and play with other kids. many studies suggest that children need to share spaces between each other, where they are allowed to play and spend time together, in this way not only they will have a right brain growth, but also they will have a correct body development.
Second, there are families who do not have high incomes to afford extra children activities like sports activities. Furthermore, every child should have the same opportunities, and in this field governments play a huge roll supporting those children. In other words, they have the obligation to take care those citizen demands. For example, in my town most of twenty percent of the families are under the regular wages, but the commune every year build a new facility in different neighborhoods. Thus, each child have the same opportunity to do an extra duties.
Finally, in the last years, commuting has become expensive for families for many reasons. vehicles, is one of those reasons, most of families have two or more cars at home. Although, in most of cases it is most convenient commute by car because because it is more faster, the car expenses such as gas, loans, and tax cars have been increasing. definitely, governments have to put focus in this issue, and invest more in public transportation since not only cost of living is more expensive, but also because commuting by a sort of transportation is more sustainable for the planet.
To sum up, art and music are important grounds where governments could address money. however, for all those reasons that I have mentioned above, I truly belive that government must to invest money in other areas such as, public transportation, playgrounds, and sport facilities in order to give a better citizen support.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Every
every year countries, states, and local gover...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the governments') or simply say ''most governments''.
Suggestion: most of the governments; most governments
...ilities, museums, and road constraction.most of governments believes that is more important put mon...
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Suggestion: However
...ut money through art and music museums. however, I am convinced that the best decision ...
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Suggestion:
...mming pools, and public transportation. No one can deny that art and music are i...
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Suggestion: However
...same aides from governments are better. however, there are others important fields wher...
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Suggestion: Many
...hildren enjoy and play with other kids. many studies suggest that children need to s...
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Suggestion: duty
...ave the same opportunity to do an extra duties. Finally, in the last years, commu...
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Suggestion: Vehicles
...xpensive for families for many reasons. vehicles, is one of those reasons, most of famil...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the families') or simply say ''most families''.
Suggestion: most of the families; most families
...ons. vehicles, is one of those reasons, most of families have two or more cars at home. Although...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the cases') or simply say ''most cases''.
Suggestion: most of the cases; most cases
... two or more cars at home. Although, in most of cases it is most convenient commute by car be...
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Suggestion: because
...es it is most convenient commute by car because because it is more faster, the car expenses suc...
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Suggestion: faster
...nt commute by car because because it is more faster, the car expenses such as gas, loans, a...
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Suggestion: Definitely
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Suggestion:
...ion is more sustainable for the planet. To sum up, art and music are important g...
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Suggestion: However
... where governments could address money. however, for all those reasons that I have ment...
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Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...d above, I truly belive that government must to invest money in other areas such as, pu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, sort of, such as, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07579462103 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83380306283 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528117359413 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1380888743 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.333333333 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276959193432 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820861705416 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664112988238 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159481392599 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071463397853 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.