A person alone can give an idea about what surroundings they grow up in or live in. The prompt above states that, a persons' attitude is more of a reflection of his immediate surroundings than the whole society, to which I agree. Regardless of differences in the personalities of two people their base values and perceptions towards things will be somewhat same if they have been in each others immediate surroundings and have faced similar things. And that is why i support the above argument for mainly these two reasons.
Firstly, when it comes to decision making what mainly drives a person towards a certain decision is their attitude towards things and that comes from their personalities which in turn are actually affected and to be precise are build by the experiences they have been through in their lives or how they grew up or what atmosphere they lived in and these things are very personal and unique to everyone they cannot be common to a whole society. For example, when a person is at cross road of his life and has to make a very important decision which will have a long life impact on them, they are most likely to choose a path which has things that they have lacked in their lives until now, let's say a kid grew up in a very wealthy family but was emotionally abandoned by his parents and when it comes to a certain decision to choose either wealth or love and support that kid will most likely give wealth up and that decision can be completely opposite for someone else, so this is not determined by what society we live in, it's determined by our immediate surroundings, people we are close with. We all might belong to same society but this does not mean that we all will develop same attitudes towards things.
Secondly, there are people whose beliefs are actually completely opposite to their society's are and some might like to refer them as mavericks or rebels. Now, if they belong a particular society why their thought process and beliefs are different from other people? Because societies can build a groundwork and influence people in certain manner but they cannot change what a person wants to believe in or how they want to be. Their are so many people who were born and raised in a catholic society but eventually they lose their faith in it, why is that? Because they might have experienced a life out of that shell and found that to be more believable or parallel to what their true personalities are. How about when people they theory of 'earth is round and not flat was introduced', almost everybody opposed that because as a society it was believed that earth is flat but that scientist who decided to go beyond what was believed in the society, postulated this.
Some might say that, it is mainly society who builds the foundation and person's attitude can be very well determined from that, yes, you can have the information about what background they come from but you can never predict their beliefs and thoughts by knowing that what society they belong to. Because it's a person's lifestyle, family, friends, careers that can determine their attitudes and that's unique to everyone.
- The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station Over the past year our late night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news During this time period most of the complain 66
- People s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.3162921348 247% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 70.0 33.0505617978 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2580.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 547.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71663619744 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52953834015 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431444241316 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 150.646370314 60.3974514979 249% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 172.0 118.986275619 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.4666666667 23.4991977007 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263962862785 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108312605826 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666390129436 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179168303761 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376796024759 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.1392134831 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.8420337079 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.