CLAIM: The importance of multidisciplinary education is overrated in today’s times.
REASON: Education should be focused on preparation for a specific career path and thus students should be encouraged to only pursue a single area of study.
Children and students are a highly impressionable group of people, and are also the future of the society. They will bring in innovative ideas which will transform the society. Such ideas require a wider perspective on how the world works and the ability to analyse it, which needs to be cultivated from a very young age. Keeping this in mind, I mostly disagree with the claim that multidisciplinary education in today's times is overrated. I believe that restricting a student to select a career path very early in life fetters their imagination and ability to learn.
In today's times, many modern industries and organizations are working together to develop services that can help a wider group of people. Technology today is bringing together engineering, arts and life sciences. Some famous examples are companies like Google, SpaceEx, Boeing airlines, and many more that need people with a wide array of information about various fields. This knowledge about different fields boosts their company's intellectual asset and shines light on a brighter future. The 21st century has enhanced the need for people to be all rounders and limting them to a fixed curriculum or area of study will inhibit their talent.
Secondly, selecting a career at a very early age with very little experience can be risky. Many people show interests in different fields at different times in their lives. Life is all about learning and the human brain yearns for knowledge. In such a situation, forcing a person to select a carreer path can lead to more failures than successes. For instance, Leonardo Da Vinci, is not only known as a famous painter, but also as an architect, a mathematician, an astronomer and an inventor. His life and the lives of many such people cannot be defined by one area of study and occupation. He is the prime example of how the human brain is capable of more than we might assume.
Finally, students are too young to understand how to select the 'right' path for their future. On the basis of what are they supposed to choose their carreer? Sometimes certain jobs appear to have a lot of potential in the future, but the market is unpredictable and cannot be the basis of selecting a stable job. Some students are better at standardized tests, but might not be very good in the real world, as academic intelligence and intelligence needed in the work place is very different.
All in all, choosing a strict carreer path for highly potential minds is a very risky decision, and many a times, wastes the intellectual capacity of a student. There is far more potential for a student with multidisciplinary knowledge in the real world, and hence institutions should work on building and enhancing skills of the students by teaching them about the same.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 106, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
...inds is a very risky decision, and many a times, wastes the intellectual capacity of a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, second, secondly, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9188034188 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81167028816 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502136752137 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6086466901 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.086956522 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.347826087 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82608695652 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194648674136 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050763643813 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459423618109 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10703311785 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255128595911 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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