Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is a good idea for the university to limit students working time

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is a good idea for the university to limit students’ working time.

Every one need to work to survive life. Students are not exception in this issue. While some people believe that students should work at the time they are studying, others states that student must send more time on studding rather than working. I personally think that working has many side effects from different aspects. In what follow, I will support my perspective.
The most significant reason is that students who work more than fifteen hours had an average degree of C. Despite the fact that a survey of students, eight of ten student work. Although, the part time work can help students to pay their bills but also have many side effects which is irreversible. They cannot concentrate on their study as much as other none working students do, In addition to that they do not have time to participate to study clubs to improve their knowledge. For example, there is a student in biology department who was first class student first year of college but he started to work as a part time in library from second year. As a result, he could not get high mark same as previous year.
Another most important factor is that the kind of work students use to do as student job will not help them while they graduate and seeking for job. Therefore, they lose the chances to find a job compare to other students. If they want good grade, they have to study hard and try twice than other students to reach high marks which in that situation they will face many health problems. For instances, one of best student in UBC college used to work during his studying. He was very dedicated student and he tried to have a good mark when he was working in university. As a result, after three or four months of continuing this way, they found him unconscious on floor so they took him to hospital. The doctor recommended him to get rest for a month to be recover and he mentioned that this weakness is because of no resting.
To sum up, reducing student work time can help them to concentrate on their study more and help them to balance their time between study and working. Getting good mark and finding good job is very essential in student’s life so they should not destroy it by working as student’s job. In this way they can manage their time between work and studying.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 191, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ight of ten student work. Although, the part time work can help students to pay their bil...
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Line 2, column 612, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... of college but he started to work as a part time in library from second year. As a resul...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...actor is that the kind of work students use to do as student job will not help them...
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Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
...any health problems. For instances, one of best student in UBC college used to work dur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 22.412803532 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 408.0 270.72406181 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56862745098 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36654563753 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 145.348785872 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 419.366225166 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4860802709 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7619047619 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245360706585 0.272083759551 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831827627189 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497932929377 0.0662205650399 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176276146698 0.162205337803 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241767591201 0.0443174109184 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.2367328918 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.42419426049 83% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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