Few individuals are of the opinion that the government must provide financial aid to those who are pursuing careers in the creative fields. To an extent I second the thought, however, I don’t completely agree that it is mandatory for the government bodies to provide artists with monetary benefits. This essay delves into my opinion on the topic.
A prosperous career in the field of music and art is a privilege only to a selected few. Every successful artist will experience some amount of hardships during the start of his/her career. While hard work and strong determination is needed to grow big within the creative industry, sometimes luck also plays an equally important role. Those who are gifted but are not lucky enough will have several financial difficulties, particularly if they don’t belong to settled and stable income backgrounds. Inconsistency in income will lead to stress, anxiety, and depression for many individuals. Hence, government intervention is needed for musicians and others in the creative field to support their daily living.
However, it should not be mandatory for the government to support those belonging to the creative fields, simply because not everyone is deserving of monetary help. For instance, someone who is well settled and earning millions doesn’t require the support of the government. Those deciding to start a career in such a challenging field must also be willing to do odd jobs to support themselves.
To recapitulate, while the government must help those in the creative careers to an extent, it is also not their complete responsibility, and those joining the creative industry should not be completely dependent on the governing bodies for financial support.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 135, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ive fields, simply because not everyone is deserving of monetary help. For instance, someone...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, second, so, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30545454545 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91527978046 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549090909091 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6059024929 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.230769231 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153708410397 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525989180213 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493459817837 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103210764949 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238217038925 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 135, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ive fields, simply because not everyone is deserving of monetary help. For instance, someone...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, second, so, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30545454545 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91527978046 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549090909091 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6059024929 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.230769231 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153708410397 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525989180213 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493459817837 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103210764949 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238217038925 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.