It is observed that in the past years, sports players encouraged themselves by winning a match and setting a new records, while in recent time, popularity and money is prioritise more. This trend is detrimental for youth and sports. My further explanation is elaborated below.
Play for money and fame by the players affects the mentality of the youngsters. Despite to set records or win a title for the country, the players try to earn more money and popularity, therefore, new generation players should become more money oriented and less effective towards the sports. Moreover, many players focus more on fan-following and attract young generation with their luxury lifestyle. Youngsters follow these players blindly and learn the same unethic ways to achieve popularity and money. For example, many young cricket players in my country now aiming to play in the IPL tournament for the popularity and more cash price rather than focusing to play in national team.
Besides this, this trend affect highly to sports themselves. To begin with, such a mentality of sports players should demerit the moral value of the sports. To earn more money, players sometime did unethical acts, such as, match fixing, drug consumption. As a result, standard level of games being demolished. Cricket in India, for example, many cricketers had caught to did match fixing in the past, indeed popularity of cricket gradually decreased.
In conclusion, it can be eventually commented that sports heroes diverted their goals, such a practise should harmful for next generation as well as the ethics of the games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'record'?
Suggestion: record
...es by winning a match and setting a new records, while in recent time, popularity and m...
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Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'prioritised'.
Suggestion: prioritised
...in recent time, popularity and money is prioritise more. This trend is detrimental for you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20930232558 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6684800937 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577519379845 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1462494226 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160182542653 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058010601019 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350338363008 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102939581848 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206316891623 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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