You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it

Dear Sir,

My name is Jane and my employee ID is 432267. I am writing this letter to draw your attention to the issue with a desktop that I am being faced at the office. There was a problem with screen resolution and UPS. These have occurred since last month and I already told the team leader many times, still no progress on it.

Let me explain the complications thoroughly. Firstly, when I switch on the system, the screen goes blank for some time, afterward, it got fluctuate and some thin black lines appear on it. Moreover, after a couple of minutes, the screen gets back into the original position. By this, most of the time gets wasted and also causes a delay in delivering the work. Secondly, when the electricity goes off, the computer suddenly shuts down because the attached UPS is not working. So, the work which I was doing at that time, get lost. Consequently, this is putting a bad impact on my work and performance.

It would be great if you address the above-said issues as soon as possible so that I can deliver my work on time. I suggest you to kindly, replace the defected parts of the computer. I shall be very thankful to you.
I look forward to your prompt response.

Yours Sincerely,
Jane Shore

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Average: 8.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...uter. I shall be very thankful to you. I look forward to your prompt response. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1013.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56306306306 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49444232501 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.675675675676 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 303.3 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3601910029 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.3125 76.5299724578 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.875 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 4.34317383033 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224652720005 0.216113520407 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639345689932 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497277290057 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115956341568 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442253594332 0.0580467560999 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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