Independent writing TPO 51

There is no deny in the fact that movies and television have a large impact on behavioral activities in young people. Although I believe pros of this matter overweights the cons because of three main reasons.

To begin with, in this era young citizens spend less amount of time outside of their house. Therefore, they are unable to conquer the world and spend sufficient time in the environment to learn using their natural senses. So, I believe media can nowadays play an important role in what children learn about nature, their society or even how they should behave properly with others. We all know how some shows can even change life routines in order to obtain a better lifestyle. Basically, it can be rather educational and helpful than it can be harmful.
Secondly, many parents may believe that televisions or movies may be time consuming and will prevent their children to make a proper use of their time.But, I believe that this can be controlled by defining a strict time schedule which can teach them both discipline and planning.

Last but not least, It is a fact that humans tend to remember what they see longer than what they here. So movies can be so helpful to put ideas in a ones mind or to teach them things that are not commonly taught specialy those which school and university refuse to spend time and energy to teach but are crucial to know. We can find shows which can help learning those possible.

To conclude, some harms that are caused by movies and television are not refusable. Although according to the society we live in now I believe we can make so much use and take advantage of the media we have in order to reach a better lifestyle for young people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64451827243 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39764474964 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544850498339 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1459598205 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.538461538 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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