Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a bit of doubt, award has a specific place in children raising, which is most decisive factor in
future personality of kids. While some people believe that every single high mark from children
should attain a prize, another think it is not necessary or even harmful to their long-time behavior. In
my view, give prize for each high mark is not appropriate because of two reason.
To begin with, give money for each high score finally can affect children mental health and
motivation, it may have negative affect on child's intrinsic motivation, which determines whether an
action is eternal or provisional. Although, give money as a reward for every high grade establish
behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continue what is already available
internal motivation is needed. Imagine a child who give money after his every single high mark, and
his parents have to go a mission or travel, or due to some unknown reasons it is not possible to
encourage immediately their children by money or other things as rewards, and then guess what
happen? A child whose efforts for get high scores depends on prizes probably experience a big
decrease in grades and regress, which also lead to feel down, anxiety or other mental problems. We
can see its necessary to teach children to love what they do by their heart without dependency on
external reasoning such as money or any specific prize.
On the other hand, if children can not able to predict when they will achieve a commendation,
probably they will work harder, this is already a discussed fact in psychology literature,
unpredictable or periodic award better than to give it in a regular estate. Because it is not regular
and they don’t know the big prize when is coming in all tasks they try to be their best. For instance
when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exams
but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, on that year he gave me a single prize but
it made feel excited for all my scores and do my best. If the prizes are predictable may be its not
enough exciting to drive me for attain high grades on every task. It is better to give just single award
and employ a child mind with success every single moment.
Finally, I assume not only give money for every high score is not required, it is threat children mental
health as well, and regular prize because its nature predictably couldn’t provide enough excitement
that is keep child's mind with do his best every single moment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 34, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
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Line 8, column 28, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...e establish behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continu...
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Line 20, column 39, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
... when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on ...
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Line 20, column 50, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...s a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exam...
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Line 21, column 15, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[1]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'tell'?
Suggestion: tell
... based on my final exams but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7174392936 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4415809399 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507726269316 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0470225194 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.642857143 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3571428571 23.4991977007 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.97078651685 543% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248261211851 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907359460665 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04261883268 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664507091461 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447768183431 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.8420337079 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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