The statement under scrutiny throws light upon two different perspectives of looking at academic subjects. One invovles specialising in a particular domain whereas the other invovles having broad knowledge in various fields. To determine which one is better, I personally feel one has to look at the academic profession in question.
Lets take scientific research, for example. A researcher working in a laboratory devotes all his time focusing on a specific research area. Usually, his knowledge is limited to this domain. It is focused research like this that has led to significant inventions which have changed human life as we know it. For instance the Haber-Bosch process of fixing atmospheric nitrogen to synthesize ammonia, the invention of lithium ion batteries, the theory of relativity, the laws of motion etc. are few of the innumerable products of focused scientific research. Scientists invovled in research of this sort may not require having knowledge of subjects apart from their own. Rather, these achievements were a direct result of concentrated efforts in one particular subject.
Now lets look at a profession like teaching. A middle school teacher for example, who helps children build a fundamental academic base does not necessarily require having in-depth knowledge in just one particular subject. It would rather be more beneficial for a teacher to have a grasp of a variety of subjects which could help him guide children better. A basic idea of these subjects should allow him to correlate the concepts used in one particular subject with another and paint a broader picture for the students. For instance, while talking about the World War in a history class, having some idea about geography might be helpful for the teacher in correlating the events that took place during the war. He may not necessarily need to describe an in-depth analysis of each and every event that took place during war simply because it beyond the scope of a middle school history class.
To summarize, just one singular statement is not enough to determine the importance of having broad knowledge of many subjects or specilizing in one particular subject. Every profession has its own requirement and therefore, both these perspectives have their own importance.
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college 83
- Integrated task Private fossil collectors 86
- Playing computer games is a waste of time Children should not be allowed to play them 81
- Today it is clear that our increasing use of technology has caused more harm than good for mankind 16
- Independent TOEFL essay TPO 13 A D The extended family grandparents cousins aunts and uncles is less important now than it was in the past 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...the academic profession in question. Lets take scientific research, for example. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, apart from, as to, for example, for instance, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26648351648 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87617682503 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568681318681 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.443305324 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.894736842 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273484094237 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081468660535 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889921767976 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180141957459 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623605984846 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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