In many people's opinion, Museum should be the place to find the cultures and civilization of all of country around the word, however some people and so do I think that museum have to introduce its local tradition and civilization, as people have to know their own tradition first than others.
In this country, many people have enthusiasm to know about other countries rather than about their country. People always think that everything about other countries is more interesting such as their music, lifestyle, tradition, language, and many other thing. So when they are asked something to explain about their own country or their own region, they do not know or they will explain it carelessly because they do not learn it in details. so if this habbits is keeping going, sooner or later the local tradition will be vanished. Therefore, it is necessary to introduce local cultures and civilizations in museum, to teach and encourage citizen to be aware with their traditions. so, by this way, people will preserve thair own cultures.
However, representing other countries' culture is good too, but this should be more an addition rather than a priority. It really can be accepted if people cannot find other countris' cultures in local or national museum as it is not part of nation history. While, in this technology era, everything can be found on internet, when people want to know about overseas cultures, they can write the key word on internet search engine, and they get what they are lloking for.
In conclusion, I prefer that museum is not only needed but also required to introduce local cultures and civilization to encourage citizen to be aware and can preserve their local traditions rather than to represent other nations cultures.
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- Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport while other people think that mental strength is more important Discuss both views and give your own opinion 87
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ecause they do not learn it in details. so if this habbits is keeping going, soone...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...izen to be aware with their traditions. so, by this way, people will preserve thai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01369863014 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61435763209 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493150684932 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.772837218 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.090909091 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310789218302 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130820252222 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926078465391 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218918731166 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602571927662 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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