Many people have suggested that young adults should undertake a period of travelling before starting university
It is a common belief that adolescences should undertake a gap year before entering university. In my opinion, this trend would create certain benefits but there are will also be some drawbacks.
On the one hand, it is clear that teenagers spend too much time going to travel before starting college would create several advantages .One evident strength is that it would young adults go travelling before entering university can help them unwind my mind. My nephew, for example, after studying for a long period, gets a break to relax psychologically and physically. Another reason is that it would help they have a chance to experience different types of people and cultures to travel outside the country. My young brother, for instance, by travelling to Australia to help his knowledge of local cuisine, cultures, and people here. As a result, after finishing to holiday they more full of energy and easily achieve higher marks in university.
On the other hand, there are some obvious disadvantages that would arise. First, students could be easily distracted by learning in school after having a long break. It means that, these distractions prevent them from concentrating entirely on their students, which could lead to lower academic results. Second, they can passion about their adventure travel which leads to they do not want to come back to school. For example, my peers take part in tourism all around the world, it brings an interest in them. This would lead to them fell boring and difficult comeback in school where learn many theories and few practices.
In conclusion , I would argue that the holidaymakers during the period before joining the university have both transparent benefits and drawbacks that we should take into consideration.
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- Many people have suggested that young adults should undertake a period of travelling before starting university 76
- Many people have suggested that young adults should undertake a period of travelling before starting university 76
- In some countries young people have little leisure time and under a lot of pressure to work hard or study 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13588850174 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7077901877 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630662020906 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3579864938 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.285714286 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25074924567 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675777215922 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729981243767 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140787311072 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752688213553 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.6 Out of 6.0
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