Some believe that local communities should rely on citizen volunteers for projects benefiting those communities (e.g., organizing youth sports leagues and collecting donations for charity). Others believe that local communities are better served when professional community leaders with the necessary skills and time instead handle such projects.
The statement compares two ways for better organizing the local community. On the one hand, the citizen volunteers could be useful, as they have regular projects like organizing youth sports leagues and collecting donations for charity. On the other hand, selecting a professional community leaders, who are dedicated and have spare time to handle such projects. While both ways have their sound benefitial, I stand with the viewpoint that a highly dedicated leader may be more useful for building a better community.
Admittedly, the citizen volunteers could be really helpful, especially when people in the community do not have sufficient time to maintain community's operation. As the volunteer's team is mostly made up by people with high awareness of serving and helping others, they are likely to try them best to help with community stuff, such as helping lonely elderly, collecting donations for charity. Moreover, it could kind of money-saving method. Without extra expenditure for the human resources, the community can save a great amount of money and spend them on other things like sport facilities.
However, only depending on the citizen volunteers may be unreliable. Not because they are unreliable, but because their time and attention. There are too many communities in a city, therefore it is almost impossible for the voluntary team to coordinate perfectly. Without paying them money, it is also impossible to require them to implement voluntary projects on the regular basis. Thus, a professional community leader gains significant importance, as he/ she could be highly dedicated. The leader should mostly be selected from the community and really familiar with community's condition. Moreover, he/ she could be a person with high reputation and therefore has weight when dealing with community stuff. Also, he/she should have time and incentives to help organize the community. Therefore the regular project could be promised.
The main advantage of selecting professional community leader is with a smooth operation, it could enhance people's awareness of improving their own community. Ideally, everyone would have the sense of participation and would think more for building the community a better place to live. Therefore the community could be more harmonious. One may argue that I am too optimastic to the situation. I admit it could be a little difficult since everyone has their own life and schedule. But we are only talking about the potential advantages. Thus, the operation should be further explored.
To sum up, the local community could not only rely on the citizen volunteers because they may not gain enough attention. A professional community leader will gain more importance and build a better community with smooth operation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'leader'?
Suggestion: leader
...and, selecting a professional community leaders, who are dedicated and have spare time ...
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Line 5, column 787, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...entives to help organize the community. Therefore the regular project could be promised. ...
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Line 7, column 288, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...g the community a better place to live. Therefore the community could be more harmonious....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, while, kind of, such as, talking about, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38620689655 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86913313687 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473563218391 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4636860094 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1153846154 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7307692308 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318797146199 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916266713941 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717566480063 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20845478454 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547434759466 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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