The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton

The line graph demonstrates the proportion of visitors to England who went four unsimilar tourist attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.
Overall , it is clear that the percentage of visitors to Pavilion and the Pier rose over the period. While the proportion of travellers to other attractions dropped.
The percentage of tourists to England went to Pavilion started at about 23% in 1980. Then this figure increased steadily to reaxh a peak of marginally above 50% in 1995, before falling slightly to around 35% in 2000 and then to roughly 31% in 2010., slightly higher than th Festival.in 1980, only 10% tourist to England went to Pier. Despite some minore fluctuations, this figure rose considerably just over 23% in 2010 from around 9% in 1990.
The most favorite Brighton attraction in 1980 for trippers to England was the Festival. Although 30% of these attended the Festival in 1980, by 2010 this percentage fell slightly to 28%. In 1980, the figure for tourists to the Art Gallery was 21%. It then grew to a peak of around 38%, before falling noticeably to exactly 20% in 1990. It continued to drop to less than 10% in 2010.It was, therefore, the least popular attraction at the end of the period.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, then, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1010.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85576923077 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6666046634 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548076923077 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4078991242 43.030603864 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8181818182 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.36363636364 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215700735381 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895091425796 0.103423049105 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106022650924 0.0843802449381 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165733609411 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128839882537 0.0819641961636 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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