The plans below show the layout of a university s sports centre now and how it will look after redevelopment

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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The given both draft describe the design and infrastructure of present condition of university sport center and in near future how the building look alike after the succession of reconstruction plan.
To begin with, in future the new building structure will cover more area than present and the south entrance and swimming will remain at the same in new building too with same size. Similarly, the north direction of the main building is allocated for the gym hall which will be unchanged but the size of the gym will much larger then now. The seating facilities for members also be at the same place.
Furthermore, the outdoor court of the both side will be no longer exists and it will be replaced by sports hall in the east and leisure pool in the west of the building, however the new dance studios will be new facilities for the public in the right side of sports hall. Moreover, at the present time only one changing room is available for all members in the left of the swimming pool, but in new premises with existing changing room other two changing will be added in both corner of south. Additionally, café and sports shop will be new facilities for the public in both corner next to the entrance.
Overall, as shown in map of university sports center, in future building some important and modern facilities are added for public and some are replaced, while, entrance , swimming pool and gym remain unchanged.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 33, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... plan. To begin with, in future the new building structure will cover more area ...
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Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'larger than'?
Suggestion: larger than
...anged but the size of the gym will much larger then now. The seating facilities for member...
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Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ut the size of the gym will much larger then now. The seating facilities for member...
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Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...onger exists and it will be replaced by sports hall in the east and leisure pool in th...
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Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'changing' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'changes'.
Suggestion: changes
...s with existing changing room other two changing will be added in both corner of south. ...
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Line 4, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h corner next to the entrance. Overall, as shown in map of university sports cen...
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Line 4, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...c and some are replaced, while, entrance , swimming pool and gym remain unchanged....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, look, moreover, similarly, so, then, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1177.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 248.0 196.424390244 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74596774194 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50365452796 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 358.2 283.868780488 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.1389571847 43.030603864 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.125 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 22.9334400587 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 5.23603664747 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166549974852 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798300244792 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643258823687 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114606909976 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654285466689 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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