One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing
Nowadays,fields in society are improved, especially, medical care in foreign countries. And the result of medicine is useful to live long. Most people want to live more with their family and this development is very necessary to that type of people.In fact, the average count of living is about 65 years around the world. But in some countries this point is high because of their well-improved medicine and environment, in others the degree is low cause of poverty and hunger. For example, India, as a result of their a large number of people , they pick up medicine and perform a lot of experience. But population of theirs still die early. Not only India but also other countries develop medicine especially, Europe.Medicine help people to treat body pain or part of organism.For instance, not working member change to another or died person's.
When I was very young, my aunt was ill. Because her heart and one of kidneys are not working. Then she went to doctor.And doctor said to her that she needed treat. After doctors performed operate her and changed her heart and kidney. The result of operation she had opportunity to live and now she is with us.
In conclusion, medical care has big role in our life now. I absolutely agree with that development. From my point of view, there is not any disadvantages with growth of medicine.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , fields
Nowadays,fields in society are improved, especially, me...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...s very necessary to that type of people.In fact, the average count of living is ab...
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Line 1, column 513, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ger. For example, India, as a result of their a large number of people , they pick up...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 519, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...or example, India, as a result of their a large number of people , they pick up medicine and perf...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 543, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...result of their a large number of people , they pick up medicine and perform a lot...
^^
Line 1, column 719, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Medicine
...ies develop medicine especially, Europe.Medicine help people to treat body pain or part ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 779, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
... to treat body pain or part of organism.For instance, not working member change to ...
^^^
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...re not working. Then she went to doctor.And doctor said to her that she needed trea...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1108.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81739130435 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77413865556 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630434782609 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.999346401 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.8666666667 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151732187279 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467166133996 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535704334906 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894484206615 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390252526678 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , fields
Nowadays,fields in society are improved, especially, me...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...s very necessary to that type of people.In fact, the average count of living is ab...
^^
Line 1, column 513, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ger. For example, India, as a result of their a large number of people , they pick up...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 519, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...or example, India, as a result of their a large number of people , they pick up medicine and perf...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 543, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...result of their a large number of people , they pick up medicine and perform a lot...
^^
Line 1, column 719, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Medicine
...ies develop medicine especially, Europe.Medicine help people to treat body pain or part ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 779, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
... to treat body pain or part of organism.For instance, not working member change to ...
^^^
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...re not working. Then she went to doctor.And doctor said to her that she needed trea...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1108.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81739130435 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77413865556 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630434782609 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.999346401 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.8666666667 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151732187279 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467166133996 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535704334906 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894484206615 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390252526678 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.