One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing

As a result of progressed medical care is that people have possibility to live more and life waiting is growing in these days attention to medicine is changing for better .A lot of people agra with this opinion .Because people know the fact that human died many times from illness that is why they always pay attention to their health and do not want to pass away earher and desire to be with their family.Lots of people say that they always see good side of development.Because humanity would like to work more for their benefit in the future,build their generation and of course see it.For example,98-year-old woman that I know is liring now and she always says that she wishes live as her and certainly powerful.
On the other hand living very long is worse than normal life.Because very old people do not need for others at some times and in this time some pains begin to appear in part of body.In fact the average of living expectancy is almost 65.Right,that amount of life is lower. The majority prefer 80 years than 65 and surely this score is not too long.
To conclude, from my point of view this development is necessary to our life and era. I totally agree with that statement. Because I want my relatives to live with me and healthy. For this improved medical care is very good chance. For example, my aunt was operated 2 years ago and her heart was changed to another one and because of medicine she is with us.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, for example, in fact, of course, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1169.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53100775194 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62253057305 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56976744186 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 215.100812121 49.4020404114 435% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 146.125 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.25 20.7667163134 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200201128322 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762524929552 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671563226007 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128468613669 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00289315440208 0.056905535591 5% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.59 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 9.78957915832 582% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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