There is an old Persian saying that goes “a son of a thief always becomes a thief, a son of a lawyer always becomes lawyer”. While this is a common shibboleth in many cultures, many scientist today believe that there no ground to it. The debate of genealogy versus environment is inexorable but I find that the truth is not in the extremes since any person’s success is a juxtapose of their inherent talent and perseverance.
Many of the known iconoclast in creative field come from nondescript pedestrian households. Alfred Hitchcock, who revolutionized film industry with his unique storytelling and filming techniques, was born to a middle class family with his father working as a greengrocer, not an elite creative lineage; however that didn’t hinder him from becoming “the master of suspense” . In fact many of such prominent idols have given credit to their own tenacious endeavors, meticulous planning as well as a caring pedagogue in their early days.
On the other hand, our inherent creativity is shaped and gilded through individual experience and environment. Talent is often depicted as a crude matter like a plank of wood, education and hard work like a wood carper refine it into its final shape. Agatha Christie became the amazing novelist she was revered for after serving as a nurse in an apothecary during World War I, gaining her vast knowledge on plants and poisons which consequently permeated into her most exulted life works.
While it would be asinine to deride the impact of marvelous innate gifts in gaining success in any field, its importance must not be overly pronounced. Talent can give us a boost to become unique prodigies but for anyone with enough grit and courage to work diligently there is no hurdle insurmountable.
- The purpose of higher education is to prepare students for the future but classen students are at a serious disadvantage in the competition for post college employment due to the university s burdensome breadth requirements classen s job placement rate 68
- The council of Maple County concerned about the county s becoming overdeveloped is debating a proposed measure that would prevent the development of existing farmland in the county But the council is also concerned that such a restriction by limiting the 72
- The following appeared in a memorandum from the planning department of an electric power company Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy At the same time manufacturers are now marketing many home applianc 65
- In order to vote in school elections in lowville you need only be a citizen have lived in the district for 30 days and be over the age of 18 Concerned that the turnout at recent school elections has been quite low with only about 20 percent of eligible vo 68
- Some people believe that success in creative fields such as painting fiction writing andfilmmaking primarily requires hard work and perseverance Others believe that suchsuccess mainly requires innate talents that cannot be learned 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... extremes since any person’s success is a juxtapose of their inherent talent and perseveran...
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Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...m from becoming “the master of suspense” . In fact many of such prominent idols ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, well, while, in fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 293.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04778156997 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83503146309 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668941979522 0.4932671777 136% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3485317004 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.454545455 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1278958553 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444686365296 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030876603826 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699477866579 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02567879632 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.