The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph illustrate the information on the percentage of people aging 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different nation.

The life expectancy of elderly people living in japan, sweden and usa. japan is marked up with the high percentage in last 10 years.

firstly Japan has act as precursor on development of elders group of people.Secondly the second higher range is of sweden around 25 percent at the end of the year.

however, in 1940 three countries closely meet up with increasing range of 10 percent. but sweden and usa fluctuate the range of population during mid and at the end of the year sweden reaching 25 percent by surpassing usa wih slightly rise up around 23 percent of usa.

Therefore it clearly mention the living population of elderly people of three different nation has been increasing since 1940 to 2040 .

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Sentence: The line graph illustrate the information on the percentage of people aging 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different nation.
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Japan has act as precursor on development
Japan has acted as precursor on the development

Sentence: however, in 1940 three countries closely meet up with increasing range of 10 percent. but sweden and usa fluctuate the range of population during mid and at the end of the year sweden reaching 25 percent by surpassing usa wih slightly rise up around 23 percent of usa.
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it clearly mention the living population
it clearly mentions the living population

Sentence: however, in 1940 three countries closely meet up with increasing range of 10 percent. but sweden and usa fluctuate the range of population during mid and at the end of the year sweden reaching 25 percent by surpassing usa wih slightly rise up around 23 percent of usa.
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