This is the process of bricks that used manufacture for a building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Ebuka on Tue, 03/31/2015 - 07:32

The information presented on the diagrams, shows the processes involved in the production of bricks for the building industry.

It can be seen clearly from the diagrams that digging up of clay from the earth with the help of a digger is the first stage of the process. Following this, is the breaking of the clay into pieces by sieving it with a metal grid unto a roller. Before the clay is moulded into bricks, water and sand is first added to the clay and the mixture is put into a mould or wire cutter to make the bricks. Afterwards, the moulded bricks are dried in an oven for about 24-4...

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water and sand is first added to the clay
water and sand are first added to the clay

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Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.811 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.427 4.6
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