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It remains remarkable to me that a story of a 23-year old guy – who is totally of a different stripe – could have such an immense impact on me that it changed my life forever. In 2018, Yuzuru Hanyu had made history as he successfully defended his Olympic Champion title in a state of severe injury, which provoked never-ending torrents of thrill in the Figure Skating world. And his journey from the hospital bed to the highest position of the podium would forever embed in me, as a statue of a miracle how adversities could barely daunt a fearless human.
It all started at the beginning of the 2017-2018 season of winter sports. This season could be deemed as a once-in-a-lifetime since the three grandiose competitions of figure skating would be held in only a 4-month period. And Yuzuru Hanyu was also at his very best: he had been undefeatable for 2 years, ranked at the top-tier in the field with countless gold medals. He proudly entered the season with 2 wins, remaining serene and somehow laid-back until a disaster violently struck upon him. Whilst he was too immersed in attempting a quadruple jump, ( a jump with 4 rotations in the air, considered the most challenging and risky act on ice) he failed to land and drastically smashed his ankle on the ice. His face puckered in dire pain as he writhed on the ice. As swift as it happened, he was immediately brought off the stadium to the treatment institute and remained silent for the next 2 months. It was anticipated that it would take him 2-3months at least to be hospitalized and up to that point, the season would have been well over. For those who had been fascinated by the games and especially athlete Hanyu, it was indeed a nightmare throwing us into great despair and concern, but little did we know that was the beginning of a momentous milestone.
Just one month before the Olympic Games, Yuzuru Hanyu was back to the media. He firmly claimed that he would once again attempt the Olympics and definitely would go for a win. But it all seemed ridiculous as he was then under treatment with painkillers, which made it nearly impossible to stand a chance against any other spectacular skaters. His fans, including me, fell into an emotional paradox. We longed to watch him performs at the Games and wins, yet we doubt if that could ever happen in such a disadvantageous situation. Nevertheless, in the end, we placed our faith in him.
On the 9th of February, Yuzuru Hanyu once again showed up at the Olympics, determining to win it at all cost. In the meantime, I was watching the competition through live stream, constantly praying for him in anxiety and nervousness. “YUZURU HANYU, REPRESENTING JAPAN!” – loudly announced the host of the competition, and Yuzuru – after hugging his coach for luck – entered the ice rink. Even though I was just viewing through live streaming, I could easily sense immense tension in the stadium. Every spectator there ( mostly Yuzuru’s fans) was holding the breath in immobility. The strain was rising with a fast pace; however, Yuzuru seemed somehow calm and serene – like he was ready to give what it took. Music cued, and the blades started to slide. He began with some step-sequences, displaying his infamous skating skills that barely anyone had ever possessed. But next up would be risky: the first quadruple jump. He vigorously threw himself in the air rotated with a crazy speed. Would he land it perfectly? Would he? And I screamed in bliss and excitement! He made it! And yet the performance went on as the second jump coming: he got that as well! Then came a series of his iconic movements: Ina Bauer and Hydro-blading – all were beautifully executed. Sliding through the second half of the performance: he barely made any mistakes so far, but it was the second half that mattered. I was still patiently praying while he embarked on the third and fourth quads – and how on earth: he perfectly landed them all! I could not contain myself from screaming at the top of my lungs along with the spectators! The fun part began as he playfully executed all the step-sequences with the music echoed vibrantly. The crowd went wild and started clapping to the music. “What a scene!” – thought me. I sensed a cheerful and vigorous vibe spreading all around when the performance was reaching its climax. And the moment Yuzuru Hanyu stomped his foot on the ice as the sign of the end: a shower of teddy bears and gifts was raining on him. The fans were throwing flowers and presents on to the ice, celebrating his god-like performance. And at the moment, we all knew, that he already firmly grasped the gold medal in his hand.
The 2018 Olympics ended with miracles, as always. The 23-year-old Japanese Skater: Yuzuru Hanyu, who was born with asthma and experienced oodles of injuries, remained dauntless as he joyfully stood on the podium with the gold medal dazzling on his chest. This victory so far is the most marvelous phenomenon that ever happened in the history of figure skating, which also has altered my life for the better. Back in the day, when I was heavily depressed with school work, Yuzuru was there to save me. By overcoming all the obstacles and hardships and endeavoring for the best; he had motivated me to continue to try. Of course, I would make mistakes nevertheless; of course, I would fail countless times; yet so long as I have the guts to keep moving forward, good things will come my way; as he famously said: “Striving could be ineffective, but never goes to waste”.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... immersed in attempting a quadruple jump a jump with 4 rotations in the air consi...
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...ion in the stadium Every spectator there mostly Yuzurus fans was holding the brea...
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...be ineffective but never goes to waste
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, third, well, while, as to, at least, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 38.0 10.4138276553 365% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 106.0 24.0651302605 440% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 119.0 41.998997996 283% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4432.0 1615.20841683 274% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 968.0 315.596192385 307% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57851239669 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.5778757939 4.20363070211 133% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54297131208 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 447.0 176.041082164 254% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461776859504 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1401.3 506.74238477 277% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 968.0 20.2975951904 4769% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 4432.0 106.682146367 4154% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 968.0 20.7667163134 4661% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 116.0 7.06120827912 1643% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0147822831538 0.244688304435 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0147822831538 0.084324248473 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0146964906007 0.151304729494 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167293885343 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 484.1 13.0946893788 3697% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -894.12 50.2224549098 -1780% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 378.5 11.3001002004 3350% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.76 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 54.91 8.58950901804 639% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 200.0 78.4519038076 255% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 9.78957915832 562% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 389.2 10.1190380762 3846% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 55.0 10.7795591182 510% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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