To achieve successful development of a country, a government should focus its budgets more on young children's education rather than on universities.
Young generation’s bright future represents our nation’s prosperity, and the good education serves as a pivotal role in the process of nurturing the youngster. There is a heated topic raised up recently arguing whether the country should spend budgets more on young children’s education or on universities. From my vantage point, it’s necessary to spend more money on universities’ education instead of on young children’s, I will elaborate my perspectives as follows.
To start with, it may let young children lose interests in learning if their academic training become much more hectic comparing to the past. There is no doubt that when the government allocate more funds for kindergarden and elementry school, the children whose intelligence aren’t fully developed may highly rebel against the heavy learning load. For example, my niece Susan, a 17 years old high school student, who has lost confidence and interest in gaining knowledge, and she couldn’t even able to get a qualified grade to enter university. Since she went to too many national-invested free tutorial classes on weekends, the class always starts from 7:00am to 11:00pm, which made Susan exhausted and stirred up her rebellion to not follow the rules. She began to skipped school and indulged herself in playing video game only for entertainment. As an famous analects saying, too far is as bad as not enough. Thus, I firmly hold my view that spending more money on young children’s education will lead to negative consequences.
Moreover, substantial funding on universities’ education have positive influence on college students career success. High quality professional studies and academic training require more finance allocation as a prerequisite. For example, I graduated from Tsinghua University, which ranks the Top1 in China. Every year, the administration spend $20.000 on students exchange programme, 40 promising students are offered chances to study in Ivy league universities. I went to Carnegie Mellon University as it serves as the best school in computer science worldwide in my freshman year, not only I learned exotic culture and customs but also determined my life goal as being an artificial intelligence scientist in the future. This experience absolutely help me get the dream job offer from Tencent corporation as a researcher. According to aforementioned, there is no doubt that universities benefit a lot from the financial aid.
Admittedly, spending more money on young children’s education can build them solid academic background and improve their learning capacities. But they couldn’t aware the importance when they are too young. Over load academic training might lead to the learning interests’ declination. On the contrary, university students usually fully aware the importance of studying hard, they take any chances to get high quality education in case to win in the competitive labour market.
In sum, according to the perspectives elaborated, it’s necessary to spend more money on universities’ education instead of on young children’s.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for example, no doubt, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2619.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5253164557 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16443389353 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580168776371 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8285076515 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.045454545 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5454545455 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244461197194 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706898265481 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783752738228 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159076613081 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734807719037 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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