Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does
Happiness is the ultimate life goal for most people, no matter they are poor or rich. There is a heated topic being discussed whether the job has more effect on an individual’s happiness or social life does. From my vantage point, a job plays a pivotal role in one’s happiness more than anything else does. I will elaborate on my perspectives as follows.
To start with, reliable money earning resource represents one could live the life with high quality independently. The solid pecuniary background offered by a job can efficiently build one’s guts to develop interests that need lots of money to support. For example, I’m always a zealous video game player who’d like to spend 6000 CNY to get the most advanced PlayStation5 to playing computer games. Video games like Call of Duty series can always bring me a lot of joy by shooting in fantasy battlefield environments. This hobby wasn’t applauded by my parents since they considered it costs lots of money, especially since our family was facing the pressure of housing mortgage back then. However, when I get a job that offers me 20.000 CNY per month after graduation, there is no way for my parents to interfere with my life since I allocate my salary to support my interest. Not to mention, the electronic games provide me platforms to socializing with friends who we share the same interest in games. Thus, I firmly hold my opinion that a job has more effect on one’s happiness than social life does.
Moreover, the sense of achievement which only working can bring to me means more than joy in social life. The attention and recognition I gained from a job give positive feedback to my diligence hard work, which give me ultimate happiness. For example, my job is creating a fantasy sci-fi world by doing game concept design. I feel satisfied every time my product gives users exposure to greater creativity and offer them an easy escape from the stress of world. People may feel depressed since they face hectic working schedule and living pressure in this modern world, however, playing the game I design is a great way to de-stress from the demands of everyday life. Even though I haven’t met my users, but it feels like there exists a connection between us. Since I always look over players’ comments on reddit toward the experiences playing the game, which makes me happy and not alone at all.Thus, according to the aforementioned, a job has more effect on one’s happiness.
Admittedly, Maintaining an active social life can help ward off the feelings of isolation and loneliness that can lead to depression. Surround yourself with positive relationships that can enrich your daily life. However, one cannot rely on others to get happiness lifelong, instead one should seek intrinsic joy by getting a good job. I believe only make contributions to this society and thus the world a better place could lead one get extreme pleasant feelings.
Therefore, regarding to my opinions above, I firmly believe that job has mor effect on one’s happiness than social life does
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2565.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98058252427 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80853499011 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557281553398 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.822064346 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.52173913 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3913043478 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258033351952 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754087470389 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090475703648 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170585566418 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690106727112 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.