writing task 1 from test 4 cambridge 7

The four pie chart depicts that the units of electricity production by fuel sources in Australia and France between 1980 and 2000.

Overall, it can seen that the electricity produced by coal covered majority in Australia over the 20 years whereas in 2000 the electricity produced by nuclear power covered 75% of total in France.

In details, in 1980 hundred units of electricity produced by different fuel source in Australia which was 50 units by coal and other remaining 50 units by natural gas, hydro power and oil. Similarly, 130 units of electricity was produced by coal in 2000 and other items were accounted by small amount hydro power(36), natural gas(2) and oil(2) units.

The electricity was produced in France in 2000 was double in the production units of 1980 was recorded as 180 units. In 1980 , from natural gas and coal source produced equal units of electricity at 25 units whereas oil and coal source produced same amount of electricity unit in 2000. Other source oil, hydro power and nuclear power was hold small units of electricity 40 units combined in 1980. Likewise, nuclear power was presented 126 units of electricity as per 180 units when natural gas and hydro power was only 2 % and 2% respectively in 2000.

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the four pie chart depicts that the units of electricity production by fuel sources
the four pie charts depict the units of electricity production by fuel sources

Sentence: Overall, it can seen ...
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and seen

in 1980 hundred units of electricity produced by different fuel source in Australia
in 1980 hundred units of electricity are produced by different fuel sources in Australia

The electricity was produced in France in 2000 was double in the production
The electricity which was produced in France in 2000 was doubled in the production

Sentence: Other source oil, hydro power and nuclear power was hold small units of electricity 40 units combined in 1980.
Description: The token was is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to was and hold

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