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Greetings and teachers at The University of Law Economic-Law, your name is Tran Thi Thien Tho, student of The Le Thieu School of Arts, Vinh City, Nghe An Province. Wanting to be a piece of the school on the next long journey, she would like to share with her and express her passion for the study, thoughts, and feelings she has always dreamed of. "Only passion, great passion, brings the soul to greatness. "- Denis Diderot -. Yes, the path to success is fraught with difficulty, and the challenge is indispensable to one's passion, effort, and firmness for one's goals and ideals. And we may cherish our own dreams, aspirations, and aspirations. For her, her business passion was kindled as a 15 - year - old girl. That's when I happened to see a video of Shark Tank - a reality show where players who are entrepreneurs do their talks before a panel of investors, and whether these investors choose to invest or not. As there was a magical attraction, I saw one episode after another, and Vietnamese and American versions. And from that moment, I was just deeply in awe of the success of the CEOs and the talent, the confidence and the creativity of startups, which makes the fire crave to be a startup that burns into me. And the more I learned about business, the more I loved it, and I realized it's really hot.
In pursuit of that passion, she struggled in her education, cultivating herself not only in knowledge but also in soft skills. For three years in high school, she was active in volunteer activities, in sports, in sports, in the school, and not only in the class and in the trust of her teachers, but also in the school's assault team. I have so many responsibilities to carry with me...... that I strive to be the one who can lead and connect people together...... to build a united and strong group. I believe that this is also one of the first important bricks to build a kind of entrepreneurial leadership. A leader needs not only his ability to lead, but also the respect and dignity of others. In addition, she has been active in extracurrial activities such as - participating in karatedo Martial club's "Beach Cleaning" volunteer activity, which is part of the Event Homeland 2020: Pilgrim, who was part of the financials program and co-organizing and MC for the Goldenland English Center autumn session, and lecturing the Goldenland English Centre class during the past three months, learned things from her previous life as a serious, professional attitude to her job skills and incredibly instructive knowledge. And it's because of these activities that I've grown up, much more mature.
And in particular, when learning high quality programs, you have access to advanced curriculum, modern teaching and learning methods as well as improved language skills. This is incredibly important because language is the "weapon" essential to standstill ourselves in this time of globalization. In addition, students are allowed to visit, study, and practice in top domestic and foreign enterprises, regularly communicating with typical entrepreneurs, managers, top employers and successful alumni. She believes that UEL is her best school for learning and development, which forges her precious skills, knowledge and experiences to continue her dream - conquering journey that is waving ahead. Through my research, I feel that I fit in very well with business and management, especially international business and business administration. Because you're a determined, confident person who dares to do it, who dares to fail and who dares to succeed. These are areas that have extensive training programs rather than narrow ones in one area, giving students a global vision that facilitates working in a multinational environment, reaching out internationally, especially in the current trends of integration and globalization. While it is possible to have vision in many fields to create optimal strategies that will be able to say where they are and where they are. International business is one thousand
And business administration brings him a vision of an administrator that helps him understand the manufacturing process and the business from creating the product to bringing it to the public. Thus obtaining a solid foundation for efficient organization of resources, managing the business process of companies and enterprises. Provided the basis for you to become a successful businessman and CEO, bringing you products, modern, modern, built built, developed country. Louisa May Alcott once said a word she loved: "Far off in the sun are my ambitions. Maybe I can't reach them, but I can look up and see their beauty, trust them and try to follow them." With his accomplishments over the years, I believe that I am a fitting piece of the school. I hope that my teacher gives me the opportunity to grow and perfect myself to become an elite student at the school, to help build the growing uel School, which stands alongside top universities in the country and internationally. I'd like to thank you very much for the valuable time you've spent reading your article and offer to the teacher a blessing and a hope that our school is growing stronger and successful and is forever the goal of the hopes of our generations of students.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 530, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
..., and the challenge is indispensable to ones passion, effort, and firmness for ones ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 569, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... ones passion, effort, and firmness for ones goals and ideals. And we may cherish ou...
^^^^
Line 1, column 726, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... was kindled as a 15 - year - old girl. Thats when I happened to see a video of Shark...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 808, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ark Tank - a reality show where players who are entrepreneurs do their talks before a p...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1271, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...nd its because of these activities that Ive grown up, much more mature. And in par...
^^^
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...m, modern teaching and learning methods as well as improved language skills. This ...
^^
Line 3, column 860, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
...ss and business administration. Because youre a determined, confident person who dare...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 439, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: built
... bringing you products, modern, modern, built built, developed country. Louisa May Alcott o...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 568, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ff in the sun are my ambitions. Maybe I cant reach them, but I can look up and see t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 989, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...ies in the country and internationally. Id like to thank you very much for the val...
^^
Line 4, column 1042, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
...ank you very much for the valuable time youve spent reading your article and offer to...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, really, so, still, thus, well, while, i feel, in addition, in particular, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 10.5418719212 275% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 55.0 8.36945812808 657% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 31.0 5.94088669951 522% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 92.0 20.9802955665 439% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 115.0 31.9359605911 360% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 5.75862068966 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4411.0 1207.87684729 365% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 873.0 242.827586207 360% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05269186712 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.43567598422 3.92707691288 138% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04271565922 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 457.0 139.433497537 328% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523482245132 0.580463131201 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1339.2 379.143842365 353% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 4.6157635468 390% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 19.0 0.931034482759 2041% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 3.65517241379 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 12.6551724138 277% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.1933581541 50.4703680194 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.028571429 104.977214359 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9428571429 20.9669160288 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 7.25397266985 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.33497536946 206% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 30.0 6.9802955665 430% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0205729136556 0.242375264174 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00451448681463 0.0925447433944 5% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0183670021255 0.071462118173 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0136899551467 0.151781067708 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136907688035 0.0609392437508 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 12.6369458128 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.1260098522 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.5310837438 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 219.0 55.0591133005 398% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 530, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
..., and the challenge is indispensable to ones passion, effort, and firmness for ones ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 569, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... ones passion, effort, and firmness for ones goals and ideals. And we may cherish ou...
^^^^
Line 1, column 726, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... was kindled as a 15 - year - old girl. Thats when I happened to see a video of Shark...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 808, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ark Tank - a reality show where players who are entrepreneurs do their talks before a p...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1271, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...nd its because of these activities that Ive grown up, much more mature. And in par...
^^^
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...m, modern teaching and learning methods as well as improved language skills. This ...
^^
Line 3, column 860, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
...ss and business administration. Because youre a determined, confident person who dare...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 439, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: built
... bringing you products, modern, modern, built built, developed country. Louisa May Alcott o...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 568, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ff in the sun are my ambitions. Maybe I cant reach them, but I can look up and see t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 989, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...ies in the country and internationally. Id like to thank you very much for the val...
^^
Line 4, column 1042, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
...ank you very much for the valuable time youve spent reading your article and offer to...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, really, so, still, thus, well, while, i feel, in addition, in particular, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 10.5418719212 275% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 55.0 8.36945812808 657% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 31.0 5.94088669951 522% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 92.0 20.9802955665 439% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 115.0 31.9359605911 360% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 5.75862068966 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4411.0 1207.87684729 365% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 873.0 242.827586207 360% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05269186712 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.43567598422 3.92707691288 138% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04271565922 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 457.0 139.433497537 328% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523482245132 0.580463131201 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1339.2 379.143842365 353% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 4.6157635468 390% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 19.0 0.931034482759 2041% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 3.65517241379 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 12.6551724138 277% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.1933581541 50.4703680194 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.028571429 104.977214359 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9428571429 20.9669160288 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 7.25397266985 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.33497536946 206% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 30.0 6.9802955665 430% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0205729136556 0.242375264174 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00451448681463 0.0925447433944 5% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0183670021255 0.071462118173 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0136899551467 0.151781067708 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136907688035 0.0609392437508 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 12.6369458128 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.1260098522 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.5310837438 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 219.0 55.0591133005 398% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.