Of the two leading real estate firms in our town Adams Realty and Fitch Realty Adams Realty is clearly superior Adams has 40 real estate agents in contrast Fitch has 25 many of whom work only part time Moreover Adams revenue last year was twice as high as

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Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."

Author compares the two real estate firms in the town to help a friend to choose real estate to sell a house. While doing that author compares various factors to determine which firm is better than the other. However, the argument is flawed based on the following observations.
Author states that, one firm Adam reality has 40 real estate agents while the other firm fitch has only 25 real estate agents most of whom mostly work part time. Author spoke about number of real estate agents work in firm instead talking about their experience with selling houses, their interpersonal skills or competency to get the job done. Also having a lesser number of real estate agents in firm doesn’t explain the capacity of firm to sell. Hence the argument lacks information.
Further author states that, Adam’s revenue last year twice as high as that Fitch and included home sell $168000 compared to fitch’s $144000. While choosing the real estate firm to sell house, the revenue generated by such firm is irrelevant as such revenue not only included sell of the houses but also included sell of business place and other real estate property. Hence comparing the revenue is not viable option. If I analysed further Adam with help of 40 real estate agents able to generate revenue of $ 168000 while fitch with help of only 25 real estate agents out of which most of them are part time able to generate revenue of $144000. Therefore, revenue generated per real estate agents high in Fitch than compares to Adam reality. Hence, Author fails to prove a point with this argument.
While stating home listed with Adam reality sells faster; Author shares his experience with the both real estate firms. Ten years ago author list his house with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell compares to the another house he listed last year with Adam reality which only took one month to sold. Here, Author fails to mention the economic condition of financial market as well as real estate market ten years ago compares to last year. While selling houses market conditions pays very important role in the process. Also, While doing the comparison between sell of the house ten years ago and last year author only compares the duration of the time in which house gets sold However, to have a better comparison Author should also consider revenue generated with the house compares to its condition, its location and other factors. And competency of firms to sell the house at better price rather than faster.
In conclusion, Arguments depends upon simplified assumptions ; To Strengthen the argument Author Should provide more information about the two firms such as qualification of real estate agents in two firms there competency , experience with selling houses. To further guide his friend author should know about in which location his friends house is located which he wishes to sell As a particular locality might be strength of the particular firm. Author should consider above factors before concluding which real estate firm is better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to choose real estate to sell a house. While doing that author compares various fact...
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Line 2, column 155, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... estate agents most of whom mostly work part time. Author spoke about number of real esta...
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Line 2, column 348, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ills or competency to get the job done. Also having a lesser number of real estate a...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...t explain the capacity of firm to sell. Hence the argument lacks information. Fur...
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Suggestion: Further,
...nce the argument lacks information. Further author states that, Adam’s revenue last...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...s place and other real estate property. Hence comparing the revenue is not viable opt...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...aring the revenue is not viable option. If I analysed further Adam with help of 40...
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Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$168000'.
Suggestion: $168000
...tate agents able to generate revenue of $ 168000 while fitch with help of only 25 real e...
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Suggestion: part-time
...te agents out of which most of them are part time able to generate revenue of 44000. Ther...
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...et ten years ago compares to last year. While selling houses market conditions pays v...
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...e at better price rather than faster. In conclusion, Arguments depends upon si...
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...ate agents in two firms there competency , experience with selling houses. To furt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, talking about, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2537.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 510.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97450980392 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29955883761 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417647058824 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 776.7 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.69298639 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.318181818 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312359425447 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115933282897 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111134347213 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208459045798 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10296864104 0.0628817314937 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 511 350
No. of Characters: 2471 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.755 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.836 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.224 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.227 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.493 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.401 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5

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